Webnovel Author: passatempo - Fanfic Collection

Like from the first chapter to the third I find the lines a little forced, but after chapter 3 onwards I think you ended up getting the hang of it.

*seems like it was written by someone with some experience but not much

The story isn't bad but it isn't the best either, it seems written by someone with some experience but a lot of experience, and when I read the comments it seems like the author doesn't accept criticism.

Dante?

The author, just please don't take a 1 year hiatus again, I really like this work

Uh, sad, but at least you keep releasing chapters (ps: please don't make a harem)

Hey author, could you answer me a question? Will the protagonist take more than 20 chapters to return to Earth? Or will he return to earth before 20 chapters

Tú é brasileiro também manin? Se você for então vem aqui me dá um abraço 🫂

I felt like this moment was a bit forced but it's ok

Could you answer me a question? Are the games he makes for VR or for computers?

Why don't you do a special because you finally reached 100 chapters?

Thanks for the chapter

I can't believe how a notorious person like you says that...

Now tell me why he shouldn't run away, since he couldn't even keep up with the enemy's speed, which makes it impossible for him to use magic, and he's not good enough with a sword to face the Orc.

Because his father is VERY strong but he is having difficulty with an enemy, this only means that the protagonist will get in his father's way, and that actually happened

Cool chapter 👍

I read up to chapter 44, I found the awakening of the system very forced, and the protagonist sees that his father is having difficulty defeating an enemy, but he goes on and on, why doesn't he run away?

I hope you take bone density into consideration in a fight scene

And I know one of them is 16 years old, but even so, I'm not an employee, I think it would be more effective to kick the guy in the groin, but next time you write something like that