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isrslyhavenoidea
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it's streamed and cheek, chick is like a baby chicken
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amazing story, fascinating with absolutely splendid writing. I have been looking for a book like this for so long, please never stop writing. keep going dude amazing stuff :)
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Pretty good work keep it up my man. I loved the first chapter, had a little challange understanding some bits here and there so I have you a 4 out of 5 in writing but overall I loved it. the story development was very good the character designs are good I liked the way you portrayed characters and overall it was a good story for me loved it!
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it's okay I'll vote yours don't worry keep going!
ch 0 2 learning magic!
Reborn As The King Of The Jungle
Fantasy · isrslyhavenoidea
thank you!
ch 0 1 Reborn in a jungle?!
Reborn As The King Of The Jungle
Fantasy · isrslyhavenoidea
Sooo, it's a pretty nice story, I love the story I love the characters everything is great just a few minor spelling and grammar mistakes here and there. I did leave comments on them so you can fix them. all in all the story is good I found it entertaining, the characters are good well we only know two but Kai has a personality I like. Also you kind of switched from third person writing to first person writing without any warning or blending so I was surprised. I think you should stick to first person writing since you did that the whole way and it's what I read most of the chapter in. that's all I have to say about this book pretty good book keep going don't ever stop keep improving and stay amazing!
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I know this is fiction but police usually start with negotiation.. please don't mind my comments..
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my most darkest no need for the and what does sicret mean?
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I feel like instead of curiosity you should use fear as seeing a gun a person would be scared instead of curious you know?
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I think you don't need the at in the "I saw a guy with a shotgun at entering the store" it's just "i saw a guy with a shotgun entering the store"
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began to pick* again just trying to help :)
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I'm confused on the first sentence that you wrote. could you explain what you wrote or tried to write?
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what do you want to talk about?
ch 0 1 Reborn in a jungle?!
Reborn As The King Of The Jungle
Fantasy · isrslyhavenoidea