Webnovel Author: ListlessVenerate - Novel Collection

Hey, writing this to help convince you to try this story, should the following elements for it's future direction strike your fancy. First, no romance as was written in the description. No harem. The MC will not get into romantic relationships. The MC slowly changes in regards to their morality. So it will be a handful of arcs before any distinct negative, darker qualities manifest in the protagonist (no set number of arcs). Along the lines of ruthless, more pragmatic qualities. The MC is not a schemer, more of a fighter, but there will be some strategies deployed by the MC down the road. The MC will not reveal to others that he has the system. Nor will he just give his rewards he gets from his system to others. Even with the system, the MC wont have it easy, the MC will go through a lot. It wont only take place on a classic fantasy world, the MC will travel to different worlds but will be a while before that happens. Lastly, nothing is particularly set in stone, but this is where my head is at for where I want the story to go.

Just rewrote some of the early chapters and fleshed things out. Should be in a better state.

2 is great.

I appreciate the feedback. I have plans to rewrite the early shorter chapters. When I do, having that portion be faster paced is possible.

Happy to help.

The novel so far has surprised me. There are elements such as Leonidas understanding terms he likely never heard. There was also the overly long chunks of text that could make reading easier if it was spaced out.Besides that, I also observed dialogue that could be more clearly labeled on who is speaking. Looking forward to what Leonidas is able to achieve. Story has potential, with a few tweaks you would have a solid novel here.

Thank you for the feedback! I shall rework portions of the the chapters that seem to be unclear. MC will be changing bit by bit, on his journey. Regardless, having him be interesting is important.