Webnovel Author: LanumKing - Novel Collection

I liked the introduction, but it could use some work. For instance, the exposition could be toned down a bit in addition to the description and then there's the description of the characters that could be tonned down also other than that its a great novel.

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So the opening was a bit slow but the overall atmosphere that the writer creating is interesting and he determined the plot right in chapter 2 which was good. And i love how the sub plot isn't rushed but instead takes its time ti built up i hope the story keep bring in new interesting things!

this was a well written and well planned novel. the pacing was good the scene were explained and designed excellently. I personally think that Ethan's character is a bit generic which i aint to find of but it's find hopefully this show follows the kill off a character dynamic and does depend on dead wait to hold it back.