Avid reader, loves all kinds of books whether they are physical ones with sweet and warm smelling pages or online web novels. Writing is my hobby, and a passion that I am now catching up to.
2023-07-24 Joined Global
Will do in next editing😅
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Fantasy · Cloudee77
thanks for the feedback.☺️
Glad you liked them.
You can try spacing the two dialogues between different speakers. it will look more clearer and legible.☺️
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Fantasy · useduolingo
Overall, a very honest attempt. Very interesting world background, you can surely build up upon that. I would like to say that, it could be way better if you paced the story in such a way that we, as readers could glimpse the world and the characters intention on our own. The various informations in the beginning could be edited, grammar needs some work. Overall, interesting concept.
The Seven Hells
Eastern · Rugged_King