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The synopsis is original, It deviates from your usual expectations and that is a hook in itself. The start presents the characters, specially the protagonists and narrator of the story, aproaching the reader and making them attached. The answer of "What happened between Willy and Chrissy" can't leave my mind and makes me want to keep reading. The vocabulary and phrasing of the story is also really rich and most of the time is beautifully structured which I find highly attractive and pleasant and even better It manages to avoid being verbose, as sometimes can happen with this types of writing. However, some chapters can become a bit tiring due to the amount of cuts done by the narrator to talk about Christine's body or to tell the reader they'll know about something later. It's fine to put some subjective description, specially given that is a romantic interest of vivid passion, but if It cuts at every two to three sentences It can break the chapters pace and get in the way of the story. The endings leave the reader at a very interesting and unpredictable moment where important events are about to unfold.

The language used in the synopsis creates some tension that could engage the readers. You make use of adjectives to your advantage by writing them in the right places, giving information about the characters without having to straight up describe It to the readers. The presentations of the Suryavanshi family (aside from the protagonist) are not introduced smoothly in the story. The writing acomplishes to transmit fairly the personality and emotions from the protagonist. It manages to make the reader wonder about the main character's past as It seems to be something that still has relevance in the present. The two last paragraphs shift from ,1srt to 3rd person in narration and It appears a tad disruptive even if the paragraphs in itself are wonderful. While the different narrators and their personalities can easily be distinguished by what's written, the main tool used is plainly explaining everything they think and how they are, and therefore the story's pace becomes quite slow. However, I appreciate that the male narrator gives off the impression that he's somewhat poetic or romantic a side from being hurt. Mostly for the way he talks, and the reader is subtlely warned of his extremism/desperation. The story could benefit from some more little actions that show the reader how they are. In the chapters that follow (chp. 4 and up) the depiction of personality, opinion and vibe improves and the main character's develope more! Seems like drama and catastrophe are about to happen at any time!

The quote of the book is a great tool to hook up the reader from the begining. The introduction and following chapter is straight to the point and enticing. There's a very limited range of vocabulary and it's repeated the same information two to three times. The vocabulary could be improved. The first scene doesn't feel very dramatic even with how serious It is affecting the character. There's no inmersion from the reader due to lack of setting in the scenario and, even more important, for the lack of sensations description or mention. It takes dramatism away. However, the transition to the room idea is good. An improvement would be a better description of places, to have a better idea of the context the narrator is in. The first chapter ends with an interesting concept ready to explore, making the reader engaged and wishing to read the next chapter! The enigma surronding the seeming owners of the house is really attractive in reading terms.