Betrayal By My First Love

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Prisha_1652

This is actually a nice book. Loved it. Update more and fast please 💙

The language used in the synopsis creates some tension that could engage the readers. You make use of adjectives to your advantage by writing them in the right places, giving information about the characters without having to straight up describe It to the readers. The presentations of the Suryavanshi family (aside from the protagonist) are not introduced smoothly in the story. The writing acomplishes to transmit fairly the personality and emotions from the protagonist. It manages to make the reader wonder about the main character's past as It seems to be something that still has relevance in the present. The two last paragraphs shift from ,1srt to 3rd person in narration and It appears a tad disruptive even if the paragraphs in itself are wonderful. While the different narrators and their personalities can easily be distinguished by what's written, the main tool used is plainly explaining everything they think and how they are, and therefore the story's pace becomes quite slow. However, I appreciate that the male narrator gives off the impression that he's somewhat poetic or romantic a side from being hurt. Mostly for the way he talks, and the reader is subtlely warned of his extremism/desperation. The story could benefit from some more little actions that show the reader how they are. In the chapters that follow (chp. 4 and up) the depiction of personality, opinion and vibe improves and the main character's develope more! Seems like drama and catastrophe are about to happen at any time!

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Archana_Acharya_4083

Hello guys. I am the Author with brazen and shameless review. You dont't like the book, Dont't read the book. POV - I am still new in writing world so excuse my grammars.

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Ansh098

This book keep me in toes for a week now. The author wrote the story in such a way that we readers will wait in anticipation of what's going to come next. I am waiting for the scene when finally the both characters will clear their misunderstandings. But Author please try to update more regularly. I send you gifts too♥️.