The story was indeed a bit confusing, but it's easy to submerge into it. However, I see the author wants to make a great character development in the main character. Therefore, the main character was decent due to how easy it was to fall into a depression. Yet, it was a good start. I am not sure that I can tell this, I am a new writer, but I would like to suggest an author to do some minor editing. Also, the author has a case of telling rather than showing. Overall was great, the writing quality is pretty good. Pls update more馃檹
The story was indeed a bit confusing, but it's easy to submerge into it. However, I see the author wants to make a great character development in the main character. Therefore, the main character was decent due to how easy it was to fall into a depression. Yet, it was a good start. I am not sure that I can tell this, I am a new writer, but I would like to suggest an author to do some minor editing. Also, the author has a case of telling rather than showing. Overall was great, the writing quality is pretty good. Pls update more馃檹