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fr, mine were pretty trash, especially the first chapter, anyways, do you mind giving me your discord or something?

Soo, what happened man? saw you deleted some chapters, dont give up! i'm starting to feel a urge to come back, and people say i've improved my writing! but i wanted to see you there too! did something happen man?

thank you!

depending on how you want your story to be, you should consider focusing mainly on character pov or narrator, if you would look at my novel its a bit different but its mostly on the character pov(what they do, see) if you go to a more sci-fi story-type, with a plot based on human experiments and such, its best to have a narrator type in my opinion aswell with text bubbles of course, sinc eit would get boring too fast with only descriptive text, good job!

Its a bit dark but its kinda alright, its pretty easy to understand for me and this gave off game cutscenes vibes, the story atleast theres way more parts where describes what he sees and do than any text, i suppose this story is going to reveal things with the chapters ongoing, but its not entirely bad.

This story was the best one ive ever read, the suspense and the drama made it even more entertaining! however i would like more chapters since this amazing tale has yet a story to continue