I suffer - Superiority Complex, Inferiority Complex, Sadistic Disorder, Psychopathic disorder, chunnibyo, Insomnia, sarcastic disorder, Dry Humour-and Hate- Ntr and people with superiority complex
2023-10-31 Joined Japan
I see, thanks for the response boss.
ch 0 3 Chapter 3: Homecoming.
Anime & Comics · 3aMAyatSu
You are welcome boss.
ch 0 2 Chapter 2: The Drug Called Excitement.
Anime & Comics · 3aMAyatSu
Can you give more attention to the lessar heroine like mai, Ai and other heroine besides dxd and to love ru
ch 243 My teacher cosplaying high school girl
Anime & Comics · DogLickerGods
I see, I shall try to make it more concise for future reference. Apology for my late reply.
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Are you just gonna drop this? Its been sometime since you update
ch 36 Revelation
Fantasy · Asyrie
hey its been sometime when will you upload again?
ch 0 9 chapter 7 : fear among people
Fantasy · itadori_Yujiii
Ah hello tjer fellow author, I apologize for the late reply first and foremost.And thanks for your input, I shall check out your works later for reference. Thanks foe your patronage.
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A good read, but some words are repetitive. I absolutely love the engagement, Ill waut for the future improvement
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seperate the word structure for easier comprehension and make it more concise. For example when you say one thing after you put a full stop dont continue it again in the same para, each para should say different thinhs for better understanding.
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Also, tried removing thing like “he admitted", "he said", "he exclaimed" and other stuff, it only lengthens the story unecessarily. Althoigh there are times when they are necessary, you should not abused them too much. Keep it in a way viewers can figured out who said it from how they talk, or inother words ‘distinc voice’ of each characters. Although there are times
ch 0 8 Chapter 6 :the sorroweaver
Fantasy · itadori_Yujiii
its so much better to read, good works. Now work on the eloquency and the consostency of voice. You can do it. Also id recommend editing the earlier chapters for it. A good introduction is the most important thing.
ch 0 8 Chapter 6 :the sorroweaver
Fantasy · itadori_Yujiii
read more and most of all practoce wrotong more, you should improve faster that way. Without practice its pretty difficult to ace from the get go, I trust that you can do it though
ch 0 7 CHAPTER 5 : soulinya lore
Fantasy · itadori_Yujiii
btw "do you think I should stop" is unironically on eof the saddest quote ive read. us eit later at a low point when the mc is just about to give up. Until then build up and refined writing, you can do it 🥂
ch 0 7 CHAPTER 5 : soulinya lore
Fantasy · itadori_Yujiii
try checking my other normal, its not mine but I temper with the narration to make it more satorical. Itz pretty decent.
ch 0 3 Chapter 3: Homecoming.
Mobuseka: The Black Heron.
Anime & Comics · 3aMAyatSu