btw the system part is just a matter of preferences so don't take it to heart, I'm also noticing some inconsistencies in your sentences where they're missing a word and some typos in chapter 2 I think?
Ok so I'm making this review of your novel all because I've been curious as to what it was like, first of all your grammar it's not bad but its also not great for example in some lines where you should be using past tense words you use their present tense, and the way your wrote his "system" was too long, and to be fair I was like that too when I first started writing you can correct that by breaking down his system instead of putting everything all at once, that's all tbh I made this cuz of your review on my novel a couple days ago and to be honest with you there's nothing wrong with my English and my novel isn't that bad, I just came back to writing after a whole year of taking a break so...
Also I've fixed some of the typos and I've made chapters 1-3 more detailed, if you see any mistakes pls inform me, I also wanna add that I'm just too lazy to fact check anything scientific there and I'm already busy with school
Thanks for your review but the reason I made this novel fantasy with a little bit of sci-fi was cuz of that reason, I'm purely writing as a hobby and I don't intend on making everything in this novel accurate since It is fantasy but thank you for being honest, I know the first chapter wasn't that good but I'm still improving and learning so pls take that into consideration
Hi good novel btw could we do a swap review with my novel? btw if you get confused since I have two it's "reincarnation of the asura" you put my novel in your collections or library and I do the same as well and please leave a review if you want to, and if you see any mistakes or if I mistyped any words feel free to tell me.
why didn't I read this earlier?? This is actually very good well if it wasn't good then it wouldn't be featured
glad you liked it
thx for reading this as well
Lol everyone is fr here
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original Great Simulation
Jin a modified human centuries from the future also known as a "Cyborg" was given a mission and sent into a world known as "Fleinrim" a world that was created from the collision of the "Murim" and a fantasy world called "Flaraes" as Jin journeyed through this world he uncovered it's secrets, origins and the purpose of his mission.12 Chs 4 Collections
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Reincarnation Of The Asura
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Ray, the last remaining survivor on earth after the outer gods summoned "Doors" into earth 10 years ago and the humans fought for their home only to be eradicated by the millions of monsters that varied in size some being as tall as a skyscraper and others being as small as a pebble and due to the overwhelming amount of monsters and their power humans were massacred left and right until Ray was the only one left and was crowned by everyone before the eradication as the strongest and was titles the "Asura" by the monsters, but he was killed by a goblin the weakest monster and as he fell down and gazed at the clear white sky thinking this was finally the end as he closed his eyes only to open them again and he found himself being held by a woman as he was reincarnated into a world of magic, gods, and demons22 Chs 96 Collections
I'm so sorry guys the whole chapter after this was in bold form and I already tried to change it but It didn't work, Webnovel is kinda tweaking rn fr
Great Simulation
Fantasy · Asura_Souled