Webnovel Author: cosmicslime - Novel Collection

That's still being decided..........

The premise here is interesting and the set up around peter and the whole academy is decently being built up. The standout point here is how they actually seem like relatable 13 year olds.

The premise of the story isn't really clear for the first few sections, but the narrative clues were engaging enough to grab attention. Also when voicing the MC's inner thoughts, try spacing them out so they don't get jumbled in with other paragraphs. Like this: (Where am I?") Instead of: There was no one there.(Where am I?) He slowly rose from the bed.

This feels like a self discovery novel, and from what I've read so far it comes off pretty well, the thoughts of the main character were clearly being conveyed but, unless I' missing something the MC's name was missing for a good bit. With some clarity in the dialogue, this should get better.

A good romance novel. Although the entire matrimony part starts it off a little strong, there was some genuine buildup here and it feels like the wider world is just waiting to be explored. As long as you watch the pacing this will only continue to get better.

Yes explanations will come later down the line.

Sure, whats your series called?

This starts off really, really strong. The very first monologue sounded like it took a lot of time and effort to come up with and the protagonist seems like he'd be the perfect fit for that line of thought. Chapter 1 goes from 0 to 100 really fast so that alone should be more than enough to attract readers. Keep it up!

Added to Library. Its a really good book, and aside from the very few grammatical errors here and there, the story starts off strong. The characters seem a bit mysterious and the overall premise is very unique, only the wider world needs more exploration now.

Amazing story. The opening chapter lays the foundation for the world of Eldoria and the story as a whole. The whole dialogue about Night and chaos, and how the very universe came to be was really captivating, and to top it off the characters themselvs were a standout, Theo, leo, Aria and Caleb. They give the story a quaint vybe for the setting and are comelling enough to retain interest.

The story starts off strong and the characters seem very engaging. The only thing is, it will be hard for readers to remember the specifics of the classes and skills, meaning they'll have to go back to he auxiliary volume to remember certain things.

Reviewing at chapter 34: The atmosphere of this story is captured pretty well, the details about the souls screaming in agony and the hollow darkness that surrounded them was something that was actually engaging. The main issue I have is remembering who's who here....like the names Titan 5, Titan 6 and Titan 7 don't exactly stand out.

The story feels captivating enough, the opening chapters are marked with intrigue and make you feel a part of the world. The characters are a strong point too and in the first sections it’s good that you get to see the world from their perspective. Also the descriptive writing, it really sets the fantasy tone and paints the story in your mind.