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Nalzaar
male LV 3I'm a high schooler trying to write a story and make a game out of it one day. I'm busy with school so the story will take me a while to write and upload.
2024-02-17 Joined United StatesBadges 5
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Oh, I haven't watched that in a while. I should probably start watching that new season.
"I am a herald of equality between men and women. And as an assassin, I really don't care if you possess a vagina or penis."
Assassin's Dark Revenge
Action · H0Nored1
Nah, that's actually crazy and funny. [img=recommend]
"I am a herald of equality between men and women. And as an assassin, I really don't care if you possess a vagina or penis."
Assassin's Dark Revenge
Action · H0Nored1
Ain't no way I said Note when it's actually thoughts.
there's a random "I" at the end of the paragraph
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Prophecy: rising of the first hybrid
Fantasy · dera_damsel
yeah, I keep confusing the two due to the similar names
Anderson devised a sinister plan to weaken Orpheus and Danny, and then attack them. To accomplish this, he planned to use wolfsbane to poison Orpheus, while Danny would be weakened by the use of silver. Although Danny is a legacy vampire, his mother is an ordinary vampire, which means that silver will only weaken him as long as the silver weapon is in his body. Once both Orpheus and Das are weakened, Anderson and his wife launch a brutal attack against them.
Prophecy: rising of the first hybrid
Fantasy · dera_damsel
wait nevermind, I get confused with the names Dylan and Danny
Anderson devised a sinister plan to weaken Orpheus and Danny, and then attack them. To accomplish this, he planned to use wolfsbane to poison Orpheus, while Danny would be weakened by the use of silver. Although Danny is a legacy vampire, his mother is an ordinary vampire, which means that silver will only weaken him as long as the silver weapon is in his body. Once both Orpheus and Das are weakened, Anderson and his wife launch a brutal attack against them.
Prophecy: rising of the first hybrid
Fantasy · dera_damsel
Wait, am I tripping? Wasn't Orpheus the legacy vampire and Danny the werewolf, or did I remember that wrong?
Anderson devised a sinister plan to weaken Orpheus and Danny, and then attack them. To accomplish this, he planned to use wolfsbane to poison Orpheus, while Danny would be weakened by the use of silver. Although Danny is a legacy vampire, his mother is an ordinary vampire, which means that silver will only weaken him as long as the silver weapon is in his body. Once both Orpheus and Das are weakened, Anderson and his wife launch a brutal attack against them.
Prophecy: rising of the first hybrid
Fantasy · dera_damsel
the 0 there seems to be a mistake
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Prophecy: rising of the first hybrid
Fantasy · dera_damsel
extra quotation mark
"Okay, we'll be down in a minute," Diane responded, grateful for the reminder."
Prophecy: rising of the first hybrid
Fantasy · dera_damsel
Camila packed the dishes and washed them. After she was done, she packed her things and prepared to go home. something like that
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Fantasy · dera_damsel
it sounds kind of off here. i can't explain what part sounds off, but it does.
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Fantasy · dera_damsel
finally the clarification I was waiting for
Dylan didn't seem surprised by the question. "That's because she's our mate," he replied.
Prophecy: rising of the first hybrid
Fantasy · dera_damsel
at the end of the page the part that says, "The wondered why such a wasn't scared to wonder into unknown it was like a butterfly wondered into a lions den" it should be changed, it has lots of grammar errors. I'd go with: "They wondered why such a person wasn't scared to wander into the unknown, it was like a butterfly wandered into a lion's den."
ch 11 Chapter Eleven: Turned into wine
Prophecy: rising of the first hybrid
Fantasy · dera_damsel
It seems there is a duplicate portion.
ch 10 Chapter Ten: Orpheus Pendragon
Prophecy: rising of the first hybrid
Fantasy · dera_damsel
I'll probably write more chapters in the perspectives of other characters. BTW, 3 of the love interests have already been mentioned.
ch 10 First Mission Aftermath - Michael Hurst/Calderon Bray
From Depression to Challenging Existence Itself - Part 1
Action · Nalzaar