Webnovel Author: ATriste - Novel Collection

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Shameless author 5-star review because f*ck yea I love my story! If you're following along and enjoying the story please leave some comments and reviews. I love to hear what you guys think about the story, it makes my day. Also, keep the power stones coming [img=update]! Love you all!

Mythra: A New Age of Heroes

Fantasy · ATriste

ATriste

28d

Posted

A nicely orchestrated romance in a high fantasy realm. Well, there's nothing quite like young love in an interesting setting and with an unusual twist. The main character seems to be finding herself and potentially she may be coming to understand her feelings for a few people in the future. The author has painted a very vivid picture of the aristocratic world that is being introduced. That being said, there were a few grammatical mistakes, especially in the earlier chapters; so, I'd recommend the author give the work a fresh read-through to touch them up. Still, this has all the right fixings for an interesting romance tale. I'd recommend it, keep up the good work!

Cupid Royale

Fantasy · The_Vntage_Pen

ATriste

28d

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Perhaps, you could break this paragraph up into a few more. So far, your prose is good, and the story is entertaining.

I was an avid daydreamer, a cherished childhood pastime that had stuck with me as a lifelong habit. My daydreams often revolved around traveling and engaging in activities my father would never allow. However, on this particular occasion, my thoughts transported me to a picturesque orchard. Birds filled the air with joyful chirping, butterflies danced in the breeze, and fallen leaves were gently carried away. Descending from my swing, I reached for an apple within my grasp. Stretching on tiptoe, I sensed a presence from behind, swiftly plucking the fruit from the branch. Turning to identify the unknown guest, I found myself met by the gaze of King Elrond. He graced me with a warm smile, tenderly kissed my hand, and said my name with a mesmerizing cadence, it felt too good to be true and of course it was because he continued saying my name as if he were summoning my attention, uttering, "Princess Aiyana, Princess, Princess Aiyana." His voice echoed as I slowly returned to reality, only to realize it was Sephora gently tapping me.

Cupid Royale

Fantasy · The_Vntage_Pen

ATriste

30d

Posted

Wow okay, quite the ride. This story's world is pretty interesting, especially with the latest chapter's development. A very different and very cool take on the use of systems in a novel. I like it, it will lead to a lot of new development for the genre. There are some definite grammar and punctuation errors, and some parts seem slightly rushed, but with polish, I think this story has a lot of potential (story essence is far more important than technique that can still be refined). I can nitpick a few other things, but in the end, it's the author's story to tell, and they seem quite capable of telling a good one. Good luck, and I look forward to future updates.

The Duke's Youngest Son is a Regressor

Fantasy · Rerian

ATriste

30d

Commented

Kind of an abrupt transition. Maybe just add a little more detail to this reawakening so it's more obvious what's occurred to the reader.

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The Duke's Youngest Son is a Regressor

Fantasy · Rerian

ATriste

1mth

Replied to Rerian

Thank you for catching this! I've corrected the error.

"At least this cell has a companion," he mumbled, his gaze resting on the infant yakshi, the nascent divine soul of a tree deity, that slumbered peacefully, resembling a flawless porcelain doll, nestled amid a cushion of newly sprouted lichen and the roots of the majestic banyan tree at the stern of the raft.

Mythra: A New Age of Heroes

Fantasy · ATriste

ATriste

1mth

Posted

Alright, so the stability of updates could use a bit of work, but I'm guessing this is a work in progress. The premise of this story is really quite good though, I hope Rerian tries to develop this story more because I'm actually interested to see what happens next despite there only being a couple of chapters. There are some grammar and punctuation errors, but nothing so major that it makes the story hard to read. I personally think the story should stay in the first-person perspective, the storyline feels very personal, which I think gives the plot a little something extra. So Rerian if you read this, please keep it 1st person. All-in-all I'd say this will be a really decent read once more chapters come out. Sirius is a very likable and relatable main character and the first chapter is pretty compelling for an introduction. Good job!

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ATriste

1mth

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Capitalize 'some' and 'which' in the following line. The prose are good though.

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