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17rapidz
male LV 1i make stories lol
2024-05-02 Joined AustraliaBadges 3
Moments 18
descriptive words could be used more, in my opinion, I think emotive language furthers a better connection with the reader so try focus on that. take your time to practice and further it, experiment with different ideas.
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I understand what you mean about it. Apollo was surprised because not many shops are targeted in the galactic drug trade. And yeah he does have a mental illness. Let me know if you have any questions hope this helped
ch 0 1 Chapter 1, "Control"
Apollo Mecha
Sci-fi · 17rapidz
good adding comedy, transitioning between chapters have been improved upon. well done!
ch 0 5 Training Day
Zombie killer Reborn
Fantasy · Samod_the_Creator
explores the different side of their version of humanity which is good!
ch 0 3 The Party
Zombie killer Reborn
Fantasy · Samod_the_Creator
thank you, will keep publishing this!
make sure that you direct the story more clear (whether it be story-telling, grammar, etc). make it more descriptive and emotive for the reader. indicate the flashback and how they think to themselves. if it was more clear, it would have been a better intro
ch 0 1 DAMSEL
THE BILLONAIRES LOVE
Urban · Efya_Queen
just make sure that emotive language is more used to connect your readers to the story more. i think stephan should have more interactions to build up this feeling
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average life of a teenager
Wake up, brush teeth, go to school, come back, sleep. Wake up, brush teeth, go to school, come back, sleep. Wake up, brush teeth, go to school, come back, sleep. Wake up, brush teeth, go to school, come back, sleep. Wake up, brush teeth, go to school, come back, sleep. Wake up, brush teeth, go to school, come back, sleep. Wake up, brush teeth, go to school, come back, sleep. Wake up, brush teeth, go to school, come back, sleep. Wake up, brush teeth, go to school, come back, sleep.
Abnormalities: Spirit
Anime & Comics · Skono_Writer
zesty ahh squad
Ugh, it's my bullies... The one on the left, his name is Kenji. The one next to Kenji is called Ongaku. The one next to Ongaku is Kabouka, I know, stupid name, right? The one next to Kabouka is Kitrent. The one who called out to me just now was Ongaku. Watch, they're about to say 'Kenji, Ongaku, Kabouka, Kitrent. Together, we make the K.O.K.K brothers!'
Abnormalities: Spirit
Anime & Comics · Skono_Writer
hi! welcome this is my first main project, hope you enjoy it!
ch 0 1 Chapter 1: "Sirens"
Terror Strikes
Fantasy · 17rapidz
descriptive, emotive language that can improve connections with readers would be good. dont be shy to experiment with comedy other than romance, it lightens the mood well. i think it can go well just need more time for it to grow