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These chapters could be so much better. This whole controversy with the refs is a horrible plot point. These system quests with failure consequences is typically something universally hated .

Way to forced. Definitely did the Clefable wrong, just to add drama and probably a free cleffa. Really good and exciting story up to get, but gonna have to stop now.

The story been going way downhill since the rebellion. So many decisions just didn't make sense. He did everything in the rebellion and wasted away his life just to bend the knee? when he already had the greatest city in the world. This was like the culmination of it all, think the story is unreadable now.

Man really don't like it when you write about ash and team rocket. All the interactions come through feeling extremely stupid especially the way Ash acts and treats everything. To make it worst, you add in Erika and I just completely question the logic behind alot of the decision. Why run into a potential team rocket base alone? just doesn't make sense. If ash did it alone I could blame his young master syndrome for it... but Erika is part of her league. Why didn't she at least call someone to give a warning or ask for back up?.....

Man what a make let down. Clones of any sorts always ruins a book. To many things and the story tends to spiral out of control. I thought we avoided the whole clones situation, now you randomly give him a Clone power from the op system that could have been anything. What a letdown.

These last few chapters seem so cringey and forced. Like this is now just beyond oblivious and dumb. Really hard to read, and losing alot of interest cause of it.

oh god.... not clones . clones universally kill all novels. things are never the same afterwards.

Chapters are getting extremely bad and repetitive. identical paragraphs back to back, probably due to using ai.

You can also notice certain paragraphs repeating itself with the same content, but in different style.

Disappointing . Petrel seems to ALWAYS escape in every pokemon story no matter how big an advantage the Mc has. No one ever brave enough to completely change canon.

Characterization in the beginnings is pretty bad especially in this chapter. With great intellect comes photographic memory as well as old memories, yet Mc continues to act like, I love my parents, I enjoy these new parents, go to work, never see your son, I completely understand.... yet forgets that they will die soon by canon timeline. That's not how someone who supposedly loves their parents should be acting if you know their gonna die... unless you forgot, yet you remember useless school information? Full of holes in this chapter.

Wait wait wait..... Instead of Bobby B dying.... his death will instead start the war of the 5 kings. that's my prediction now.

Lol... I was thinking the same thing while reading this. at first it was like... haha dumb meph sitting there watching Layla power up. .. then Layla goes and chills and let's him power up. SMH

Ash suddenly becomes the biggest murderhobo in the entire series in one arc lol. He's the definition of a Chinese xianxia MCreincarnator - checkKnew about the team rocket plot by foreknowledge and actual proof on ship, but kept everything to himself for loot - checkLooted the fk out of the place while everyone busy battling for their lives - checkShow up last minute to act like the hero - check. Knowingly endangered the lives of many many children, including all his friends who are technically children without a shed of remorse- check

Jorah gonna be calling her Lyanna "the Social Justice Warrior " for her nickname.