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"What happened to the wolf? Was it a wolf? It has red eyes, I ---- " I stopped abruptly and looked at him "How did you shoved it like that?"
"Adrenaline, I guess" he answered. But his eyes were not looking at me when he said that.
"That can be but I think you're lying" I said. Some weird things have happened today, one, this guy showed up and showed me his interest, two, a woman he knows, obviously came to us saying I have to be careful from him and three, a freaking real wolf just attacked me.
He was silent for a bit.
"You are my mate, Alesha."
Here he goes again with that.
"What mate? Like vampires and werewolves?" I asked in a sarcastic way but he did not laughed.
"Not vampires" he said.
I looked at him and tried to find emotion to betray his words, some kind of emotion to show he's just kidding with me. But there are none.
"Werewolf" he continued, "The one who attacked you is a werewolf."
"In broad daylight? Aren't they suppose to turn during a full moon?" I just went along with what he is saying.
"Alesha, we are real" he said.
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Esha just wanted to live peacefully and get over senior high or high school life but this changes gradually when things started to unravel from her past.
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The story is enjoyable and light. I am into dark and psychological settings but even so, I enjoyed this novel so far. The author follows a steady pace which keeps the reader always refreshed after a chapter. The characters are easily likable and there is enough of development to be able to analyze their personalities. I would love to see more work done on the world background development as the story so far has been focused only on the main character. However, I do feel there is a great opportunity, with the latest chapters, to begin building up a world in the story. The grammar is good and delivers the story clear. Other than my selfish request to see more of the world building, I believe the story so far has kept a high quality. Good job! (:
The start was very interesting and I liked the way how author did make the whole story intriguing. I already added the story in my library and definitely gonna continue reading it. Author did a great job in description part. The story development is also well in pace. All in all author did a good job and keep up the good work dear author. I will definitely give 5/5 for the authors hardwork and to encourage the author to deliver such more good works. I'm cheering for you author
Alesha's daily life, more like Alesha's roller coaster of a daily life. Her life was normal, then here comes Cain barging in like a wrecking ball. I understand her reaction of being weirded out by the constant stares that Cain was giving her even though it's the first time that they met. Withal, I hoped at first that she could be friendly instead of openly showing dislike to a stranger. Well, hats off to Alesha for being able to adapt to circumstances quickly. On the other hand, Cain simply threw all of this information to Alesha without remarking what she'll feel about it. He should've been more considerate! Bad werewolf! I surmised that Esha would faint the moment that she hears that these mythical creatures, vampires and werewolves, are real. Then she was kissed by a man she just met. She's also being targeted by a certain alpha and a pack. How eventful is her life??? Poor Alesha, save her from these hungry and tactless werewolves. I guess I'm just wishing for more detailed action scenes? I know it's not your focus, so don't mind me. [[[ Constructive and technical, please don't hate me.]]] The constant POV changes in one chapter is quite confusing. It also cuts off the flow of the progression. I suggest that you change the POV's after a chapter of focusing on just one. The characters are all aggressive to the point that there is no more division in their propensities. I noticed some grammatical mistakes like incorrect verb tenses, overuse/misuse/absence of punctuation marks which leads to comma splices and run-ons. These mistakes doesn't really affect your plot, but the transition of your passages. We all make grammatical mistakes, so don't worry about me pointing this out. I just want to tell you because I know that your work can still be even more beautiful and you can still improve as a writer yourself. I'll be cheering you on! Please continue writing this art of yours!
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Great starting for the story. I didn't found any mistakes. I like in start that the story tries and make you fear of the unknown. It can still be imporved and I can say that you are on the right path. Just waiting for some action. I also liked the changing perspectives. The only problum I faced was the character name I am so bad at remembring the names😅 But overall the novel is great. I will continue to read and will update the review. Keep up I support you.
I'll do my review honestly as possible like what I do in most review swaps. Writing Quality is great. The plot is interesting even if it is the common werewolf plot. The paragraphs are attention-grabbing, it really hooks me to the point I did not realize I finished all eight chapters so far. I'm not good at grammar too, so I can't just randomly judge the grammar of yours. Character interaction is wonderful, especially the "small talk of love" chapter. Overall, I will be giving your novel five stars!