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The world without magic. The truth being forgotten. The lives worth risking. Likha didnt know what she is in for when her grandfather passed down a shard before he died. Ever since then, she started to receive dreams, visions, and warnings of different kind that could endanger her life and others. Now she must find the truth behind the shard...or is the truth is really what it seems?
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Character design excellent Grammar good World background Hmmmm..... You need to at least read first 5 chapter to understand... I will advise author to split extra huge sentences in the first chapter. But it's also play since everyone have different style of writing. Good luck keep up the good work!,🙏
It's a good story and I like the way the author writes it. Though I don't actually get into the female lead novels I still try to get some points from there. Nice job, keep it up.
Nice story. Love the flow and the character introductions. Nice story, minimal errors and good quality. Best of luck with the story! Though the first chapter was really small it helped in delivering a greater impact. The story really picks up in the next chapters.
overall good job i also found a similarity with our novels which is the translation sides stuff which is a coincidence i think hehe. overall its really nice well done
The story is good so far. I would like to see many more chapters from the author in the future. This is a great attempt. Has minimal errors and the story flow is good. Cheers to the author! Happy writing!
Nice story there. Its just the beginning but the writing quality is good The story is developing good Characters are nice And the world background is amazing . Well As I said its just the beginning so lets see what the author has stored for us.
I was a little confused as to why the first chapter was so short, moving on to the second chapter I realized. The setting is nice, it's nostalgic to my memories with family while also being completely different. The smooth interaction between Adrian and Likha really makes it feel cozy while also having the first chapter at the edge of your mind making you wonder what's going to happen and how it's supposed to fit into this picturesque setting.
Author, your novel is on a good track and there is no problem with your grammar or anything like that. It is also a first for me to read a novel with such intermingling of two languages that are Filipino and English. Loved it! Btw, it would be best if you break your long paragraphs into separate parts. It makes the whole chapter look better, like in ch 4. loved that chapter, btw.
Cool! A rare story set in the Philippines that I actually had fun reading. In case you hadn't noticed, I had a blast with this story. But enough about that, on with the critique! First up, grammar. Fundamentals are there, but there are frequent lapses that you might want to correct for crisper sentence construction. All in all, fairly standard and something a once over or getting a beta reader can fix. Next up, prose. There's something intimidating about a giant block of words that breaking them up would solve. Whenever an exchange is about to happen, I find it helpful to split off the paragraph, limiting it so that only a single person is speaking on that block of text. It's consistent, simpler, and over all less confusing than reading a whole chunk of text. Dialogue. It felt natural enough. So spice it up to your liking by adding what the character's cadence or actions are afterwards. It gives the dialogue more kick and it makes the characters feel alive. Story's something I can't critique without reading more, unfortunately. But props to the Tekken reference. That's it I think. Keep on writing. The only way forward is up. 👍
This story is interesting, the author mixes up the dialogue sometimes with what I assume to be his native tongue, which is neat. It could use some more attention towards punctuation. World background and the character design are aight. It can get a little jumpy between chapters but it's an all-around good read.
Are you perhaps a filipino?, cause i saw some very familiar wordings there xD, its a very interesting story though... and did you get good grades in the finals? haha anyhow it's a good read... very much liked it :)