/ Teen / Fleur-de-Lis
Synopsis
Stalking
(v.) When two people go for a long romantic walk together but only one of them knows about it.
ꕤꕤꕤ
"There really is nothing scarier than the unknown."
That is what a seventeen-year-old highschooler, Fleur Elise Avery, realized as she received unwanted gifts, a series of strange phone calls, weird letters and... bizarre deaths of people in her town.
ꕤꕤꕤ
'How dare he touch her with his filthy hands? Only I can touch her because she belongs to me!
Hell, I will do anything just to be with her, anything.
Even if it means killing everyone. And if I still can't have her, I will kill her then myself.
That's how much I love you, Fleur.'
-Unknown
ꕤꕤꕤ
Started (Webnovel): August 1, 2020
Ended:
Book status: On-going
———————
This is my first book! UwU
Story written in English OwO
Sorry for typos and grammatical errors. English is NOT my first language! Leave a comment if there's a correction and/or criticism, I'm open to both.
This is a work of fiction. Any names, characters, stories, events are all FICTITIOUS. Any resemblance to an actual person (living or dead), actual events and stories are purely coincidental.
This book may contain detailed gore that may be upsetting to some viewers. YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED.
Tags
-- Power
Ranking 
-- Power
stone You May Also Like
31Reviews
4.72
- Translation Quality
- Stability of Updates
- Story Development
- Character Design
- World Background
Share your thoughts with others
Write a review
I don't really read romance but... I don't understand! The first chapter made me feel all giddy and ****! The next thing I knew I kept reading till the end. It's interesting alright. I'll give you that. The story flows well and this type of first person narration makes it soft for my eyes. Just hope there were more chapters TT
Usually I’m not into romance but this caught my eye... really interesting and great to see a story like this around here. Needs some recognition!
Writing Quality: (How many times I have been writing like this thing in other novels?) Please separate actual conversation and text. E.g: "I don't like..." F said then A nodded and said "I also..." Into F said that she doesn't like of...and A agreed with her. or F sighs, "I don't like..." "Me too..." A nodded. Somehow the conversation line in the novel make the novel is...kinda off from track? I ask thee, did you want to write Japanese-styled LN or novel? The concept of writing itself is important, even Japanese LN doesn't has too many conversation line in each of chapter. But the authors of Japanese LN often write like this: "Cast! Vortex!" (Zeke) "Heh!" (Audrey) (Which makes the LN is more confusing in translation and to read) Your novel gives off vibe of "Mirai Nikki" anime, but your novel has two yandere characters inside it (I think?). I won't criticize your grammar since both of us aren't a native english speaker, but at least...I suggest you to write: (Line) (Long Text) (Long Text/Line) Again So, you could save more space and writing more text! XD Also, you don't really need to write "Flashback" or "Flashback Ends" at every "past events" UNLESS you write an EPISODE-like chapter. But I can strongly suggest you not to use that too much otherwise your story would be "boring". Since it's a thriller, horror, and gore-type novel, You at least need to write and describe the "terrifying situations" the MC or dying sub-characters faced. Not explaining them via "conversation lines". For example, look like when you described Fleur ran from the hooded man, from her felt something off until blended in the crowd. When I was reading that, I can "felt" what if I was Fleur on that place. Stability of Updates: Every authors have their own problem that delay or prevent them from writing or uploading new chapters. Therefore, I won't criticize this. Story Development: Yeah, I understand it. Someone wants to make Fleur to become him only, by killing someone who tries to "hit" on her. It needs more detailing story flow, so the readers who aren't into "Romance" Novel can "following the flow" and "feel the same way". Character Design: I know and can imagine about Fleur and Axel's appearance, but how about Aisha and Colt? The readers need to "know" what kind of appearance the "main supportive characters" have. You can follow this formula: Physical Appearance, Character (Sorrowful, Envious, etc), and Life Background, so you can skip few sentences of phrases to describe them. You had understood this when you described about Fleur and Axel. So keep it up for other characters! World Background: SInce this story located on the modern city in modern era, I won't say anything. I will only make a review if someone writes a fantasy story. But, I suggest you to explain at least a little, the city where Fleur lives, as well as the environment (social or physical ones) around her. So, the readers can "diving" into your story more deeper. (Well, I know Fleur de Lis is Chevalier d'Eon's NP, XD) I hope you could fix your mistakes and make another good chapter! Be healthy and stay safe, since COVID-19 case in Philippines is rather high between countries in SEA. (Welp, don't get me wrong. I'm not a nitpicker. I just want someone's story who has a stable "footstep" become brighter than their originally are. I'm also love gore, yandere story like this) Sincerely, Dead/Lost Novel and Manga Writer.
Reveal Spoiler
This story definitely has some chills and suspense building up slowly. At some points, you think you know who the unknown yandere killer is, and then the next everything changes on you and you're not sure. I can't wait until the eventual reveal of who the killer is and how she's going to be free from them. Loved this and can't wait for more!
I love it! I love yandere stories and this is my new fave! I love how well-written it is. There is also a mysterious vibe in it that I love so much. I really enjoyed reading it!
I am a romance fanatic. I love the scenes which make your heart flutter. The plot of the story is weaved beautifully. It has so much potential to be honest! Keep writing! More Please!
A breath of fresh air. This novel reminds me of the series You on Netflix where you're not sure if it's a romance or a horror/thriller. Really interesting premise. Great job author!
I’m your reader from Wattpad and this book is 10x better in Webnovel! I’m a certified Kofi! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
This one has a good start. It surely baited me with that first chapter. As an anime fan, who happens to have a taste for shoujo genre, i found the story quite interesting. Author has good grasp of grammar, however, I can't help but notice the repetitions of words used in the storytelling. What I mean is, the character expressions and adjectives used to describe it are quite generic. This isn't a bad thing, but I think I'll have a better reading experience when the vocabulary of a book is immense. Please don't be discouraged on this, coz your work is really good. This is something you can improve on. Kudos!
This is my first time reading a "stalker" novel since I don't read much thriller. I can say that you've really hooked me with your first few chapters, the length of the story is just right and I can't seem to stop reading. A few things I'd like to point out is your description, I feel that if you could enhance your writing to be more descriptive, it would bring much more thrill and the readers can feel your characters even more. There are also a bit of grammatical errors so it would be better if you'll go back to your chapters and edit a little bit here and there. Besides those points, you've put up an intriguing story so keep up the good work.
The story is very interesting and very intriguing, the writing was great and the character development is very good, the writer was able to make the characters alive and not flat. But the way how the story unfolds is sometimes felt a little easy to predict, So im suggesting on making more plot twist , mysteries and some unique and special story events that will greatly affect the characters development. Thats all, overall this book has a great story that I will surely recommend to my friends
Idk why this novel has several of my preference XD Author naisu! 😆 Cute tin and a bit naive yet funny MC, written in first pov. Somehow I can feel what she is thinking here and there. 🤣 Instant library. Keep up the good work. We need moar chappy!
I like what you have here, but I'm a little worried about the reveal. As you've revealed it's one of three people. If you do anyone else it will be quite weird and lead people to dislike the reveal. I do have a theory of who it is and can't wait to read more
I actually binge read all the chapters and when I saw to be continued I was like Why?? Well, the whole plot is amazing I'm loving your book so far. One thing I would like to add is if you could add some descriptive paragraphs in your chapters. Like, you never told the readers how the school looks like or how the house or room of Fleur looks like. It would make readers visualize the things and I think that is the most important thing in a novel. Over all you book is just amazing ;)
So here's my review about this story First off, it has a really good story line. Although the first chapter isn't that really catchy, as you go on, it gets more and more interesting, Trust me. Next, Writing quality is good. It has minimal grammatical errors which are all completely fine. But as the author said, it will be edited in the future. Description of scenes is also thumbs up 👍 I love how the author describes those gory scenes in this book and the choice of words are just right. Development of Story and Characters is okay. This book is just starting, in the future chapters for sure, we will get to know the characters well. All in all this is a very good read for me. It has a very unique vibe and i like that. Well, as you all know, there are a lot of books out there with the same genre as this making everything almost the same, but for me this gave off a different vibe. Hope you guys like it as well 💗 Keep up the good work! I will be looking forward for more 💗
I read the story n I find it good just needs an editing which book doesn't tho...plus updates r constant so it's a good job by the author...keep writing✌
Oof, I may be biased since I 100% support fellow filipino authors, but in all honesty I like the story so far! Narration is great, but the sentences could use abit more of revisions so that the story can be more descriptive, but all-in-all i love the story so far. This story is interesting indeed, recognize it PEOPLE!!💕 More updates please, author!!💕
The story of a yandere ? Nice, but i prefer tsundere than yandere. Even though i need to learn about yandere stuff. Keep up the stability updates and nice character design.
First read at the synopsis I already know the guy is a yandere lol. Reading the first chapter and seeing the Fl uncomfortable with the guy is like... Bruh you'll be uncomfortable for the time being lol
Reveal Spoiler
Hi guys, Author here! I am going to shamelessly give my novel a 5 star lol. But I’m not here to just do that. I want to inform all the Kofies or readers that I might not give new update for a while because my novel will undergo editing, it may be a major editing so some words, grammar, description and details will change but of course, the plot will never ever change or be replaced. The editing may take few weeks but I assure you, I will do my best to make my novel even better. Have a nice day/afternoon/night everyone!! Also... Thank you for 6K in just a month! I love you all!! 🥺