These Worlds Of All Places ?

LV 4

NinjaV2

You will maybe enjoin it. There are some reasons why I don't like it 1. Some characters are weird and not really the personality that are shown, which isn't bad in itself, but there were some bad occasions that it just fells forced. For example somebody beats up your familia member and also indicates to know internal secrets of others which ins’t a bit suspect. Ryuu is just...disappointing weak in this illustration. I mean everybody shocked that he says is the only survivor if his species and yet nobody says a nickel on information about the species. Loki wanted to say information about him yet got interrupted and nobody ever talked about it ever since. Ryuu fell in love with him or really liked him with only just a few words c'mon ins’t she really intelligent and knows stuff like "wow the thing he said was almost completely accurate I experienced in my past. Which is really suspicious I have to keep an eye on him. Ais, well why not plead for somebody's help you don't know a thing about, instead together with familia members and others dwell in his music. 2. I like op Mc´s but in this story I don't, I mean I get it he's a Monarch etc... but what kind of plot is there going to be if he's maybe even stronger that Gods (spoiler in chapter 4) Mc is a manipulative young master that has a lot of power. A yeah the last two things are the second moment he meets Bell he declared that he should speak about him as Big Brother. In the latest chapter 4 he meets Freya which oh surprising wants to make him hers. There was a moment where she fell a great power from him but nothing more, but that wouldn't make any sense she can see the soul within one why she didn't check his and make sure he really is an elf or something like that is weird. Last but least, read a few chapters and choose by yourselves if you want to continue the story. Have a good day.

LV 4

NinjaV2

Well my first review was a little too harsh, I will not delete it because it has truth in it, but my overall intend was to say the relationship building was a bit too fast. Still though don't lose your spirit in the story and I hope this review makes it better.

LV 3

dysplex

This fanfic is somewhat good. And you might be able to enjoy it but the spelling, capitalization and that some words were capitalized when they weren't supposed to be.

LV 3

Astral_Ascent

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LV 2

Immadropitall

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LV 4

GodlySamurai

Love the story so far. Keep it up <3 It is an interesting idea I have never seen anything like this before so yeah more points for creativity

LV 4

allucard1222

This is a really cool and unique story keep it up👍👍

LV 1

DaoistwwYBDC

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LV 3

suicide_Elf

please more what have you done to me you made me addicted to your novel what have you done please one more chapter God-sama blesse this weeb with one more chapter today

LV 1

Federico_De_Baggis

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LV 2

tfcuhb

Story is a bit chunky, grammar and flow of the story is an issue. Just a tip for the author, POV changes are alright, just try not to over use them. Good premise, still enjoyed it, just gotta squint a little.

LV 2

Nah_U_Stupid

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