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"This power that is inside me, it is not of my creation! I reject it and I reject you!"
{Foolish boy, you claim it is not of your creation; yet the body you walk in isn't of your creation either, and yet you claim that!}
"My mother gave me this body as a gift, however, you are a leech!"
{Leeches suck the blood out of you, where else I am your very blood, I flow through your veins foolish boy; your mother is the one who gave me to you!}
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I liked this one. It is a work that successfully blended fantasy and drama. Poor Inut, he deserves more than this in my opinion but it is the author's choice, respect :)
The start is dynamic and attractive, while usually, the norm is to write in the past tense author had chosen to use present but it's not a bad thing per se. Character design is unique and genuine in my opinion. there is no information dumping and the story flows appropriately which is good. Updates are stable enough that readers don't have to wait. the only flaw I found in the narration is that it is tough to read conversations because there is no gap between them and it leads to confusion about who is saying what and which part is said and which part is not. I think it can be corrected easily so it's not a big issue. good luck for the author.
Sorry, I'm reviewing after reading for a while, but I think it's a good read, I feel really sad for the boy though, I hope he becomes great and his mum regrets ever leaving him.
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Very good story! Is very intriguing and has a very good start. I don't particularly like that it's written in present tense for the most part, but I got used to it. It does have a few Grammer errors though.
Overall, this is quite an enjoyable read. The writing is understandable although there are rare instances where there are mistakes. The story develops at a nice rate and the character design is pretty good as well. I personally, don't like having to read about all the races at the beginning, but that's just me. Overall, its a great novel and keep doing you thing it seems like its gonna work out for you.
A good storyline, the characters are fascinating to an extent that grabs the readers attention. A beautiful picture is created through these words. Overall a nice novel.
Good story don't know what else to say I rarely do reviews gggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
Writing Quality: A decent amount of grammar errors but understandable. Story is good enough to overlook Stability: Seems fine Story: Very interesting so far and unique Design: Kid is cute and hopefully spelling mc donalds on the first chapter wrong was how the kid pronounced it because it was funny and cute Background: not sure yet
Author note: Because I hate info-dumping and useless magic systems I decided to make this book. I have plans for it to run for a long time because I also enjoy the story! For me, it's like daydreaming my childhood fantasies but also being able to share them with you! So come over and start the tale!.
A good beginning for the story. Like how in the beginning the mother is nice and caring about the child, only to give him away to some random strangers at the first sight of money. As someone else said, something in between the dialogue (some actions or something else) could be to change the flow a bit, because it's a little hard to read. Otherwise, not bad.
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So far so good, the story is decent and the characters are well thought out. I am looking forward to more chaps. The only thing I think could be done better is phrasing and a few spelling errors could be fixed. And maybe the best part but no system is in it...yet let's hope it stays that way!
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The author expressed concern about novels that don't explain their magical systems very well, and I am fully in agreement. However, this guy isn't just talk. He actually followed through with his criticisms and explain how magic actually worked properly! Therefore, I think that this deserves a read, if only for the properly explained magic system!