The Greatest Dynasty Ever

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zQuinC

Hello! Author here. This is actually my first novel and so if there are a lot of mistakes or bad takes, please help me site them out. I don't mind getting criticism as long as they are objective. There are so many real-world references so if there is something wrong with what I wrote I hope you correct me as that would be really helpful. Thank you and I hope you enjoy it!

LV 13

Charlsssss

This looks really good! MC is likable, dialogues flows naturally, and the author seems to really be knowledgeable about basketball in general so its very enjoyable as someone who also knows a lot of basketball stuff. 10/10 for me, keep up the great work! [img=recommend]

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Said_Palacio

Good story keep up the good work [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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Sloth_Incarnate

Its not very good to be honest. There are a lot of decisions made that don’t really make sense. Most of the character are uninteresting and have no depth, only being added because there can’t just be the MC around. Author seemingly can’t introduce a female character without mentioning in someway how attractive they are regardles of age. Its really weird. ( this might not be a knock to some of you, but it is to me) Author doesn’t really seem to understand American culture (not sure if they’re from here, if they are then thats even worse) but they have a basic graps which is ok I guess. Though they definitly don’t know how US high school works. The writing in clunky and a lot of the dialogue is way to formal. People are always talking as if they are in a business meeting. The grammar isn’t the best either, but not terrible. Really the only redeaming factor, for me, in this story is that the Author skipped his childhood and started when he was 14. But that also has come with its own problems. As its made all the charcters, even MC, hollow with no depth.

LV 4

TOS

I like the book, but to be honest, I read until chapter 20 and it looks more like a documentation of mc’s life than a story about basketball. I mean, the interactions are greatly done but they are too few. I would rather you take your time, write a lot of fillers about his life to make us empathize more with the mc. At this point, I would not feel touched if something bad happened to him since except his basketball skills and basic information about his family, I don’t know nothing about him. It’s just a suggestion! I really like the concept of the novel though. Good luck with it!!!

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kobeblackmamba

Good story keep up the good work [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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ElNinoKenji

This is good, keep up the good work I will be looking forward on the next chapter [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]