Naruto: Indra Otsutsuki Template System

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Demon_Asmodeo

My main language is not English so please excuse my grammatical errors. I hope you check out my other novel Return Of The Demon God Dusk which I know you will love as well and support it in the collections.

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Fernandaytsh

I really liked your other novel called Return Of The Demon God Dusk and I came to this because I realized that you also started uploading another novel and I started to like it only that the writing needs to be improved.

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MelanyRivera27

I like novels with a system and this one, from what I've seen, is also good. Keep uploading more chapters like you've been doing right now.👍👍👍👍👍

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Verthragna

The premise is interesting but the writing is pretty bad. I'm not expecting you to be perfect but at least separate narration from dialogue. Furthermore you are constantly misspelling key words from naruto that would be impossible to do if you watched the series or read the manga. To me it feels like a poor translation; hope you improve.

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ThisNovelSucksBro

Complete dumpster fire, the author can't write English in an even remotely competent way alongside 3/4 of the chapters being info dumps that take up entire chapters. This entire Template System shtick this author has going on is only to advertise his one garbage novel EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER NOT ONCE BUT TWICE, do not read this do not even give his other novels a view.

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Ash_RoSe

First of all, the chapters are very short. We read almost nothing about the story as he advertises his own book at the beginning and end of each chapter. Even simple signs are not used for the dialogues and system messages. In addition, there are 2 unnecessary letters that even a person who does not know anything will notice, for example: Hitachi uchiha. yes, there were two such places in the story. As for the narrative, mc is gaining powers in an absurd way. Girls fall in love with very simple things. While mc's powers and knowledge could easily reach the top of the world, suddenly the system event was thrown. Then what mc said is the classic sentence of a brain dead person that I am ashamed of even when reading it. (spoiler) For example: While mc was walking down the aisle with his two girlfriends on his first day at the academy, a boy stopped them and said, "How do you get Ino on your arm?" says a similar sentence. mc, on the other hand, pats Ino's head and says, "you don't have to be afraid. I'm here and I'll protect you"... I don't know how the other reviews were made, but I don't recommend it. be prepared to read these. normally 2.8 points, it was because it was an original idea. But I don't want to give it that low when the score is this high.

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Letia_Gonzalez

Although the writing is not very good I can understand it and I quite like how it goes for now the chapters keep uploading more chapters.....

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Ciel1786

I think it's a story with great potential, but as it is right now it's a bit too rough on the edges. I know english is not your first language but if you start focusing on quality instead of quantity the story will get a lot better, like a chapter a day. Also, write longer chapter or at least merge them together to make it bigger.

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Touch_Me09

its good but the author is filling the chapter full of explanation about something most of us know it cause we are fan of it so mostly i skip this chpter...i really don't know where this story goes..please author focus your chapter on the story... note:im not really good at reviewing so please try to understand..haha😅😅

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Sezzz455

Keep uploading more chapters that I liked as for now the novel👌😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃.😃😃😃😃

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burning_phoenix

its'sa nice story and the idea of the story is quite good but my question is why are there two of the exact same story with different title iImean mabybe with some difference but the start is literally tha same word by word its's like you just copy and pasted and posted it again with just a different title

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Daoist2zwzfD

Идея неплохая, однако главы относительно маленькие, а также много ненужной информации по типу объяснение способностей оригинальных персонажей, а также частый пересказ канона который можно и нужно сократить, если надо объяснение путём привидения канона в пример то можно упомянуть об этом в 1-2 предложениях. К примеру автор "Перераждённый в мире наруто с тенсейганом" Хорошо использует данный приём. В общем целом фанфик неплохой, но нуждается в доработке.

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Savitar_12

I like this story I hope u can continue ....................................................................................................

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1111hhh

opnlendayk7019: This novel has a lot of potential I hope you upload the next chapters as soon as possible opnlendayk7019: This novel has a lot of potential I hope you upload the next chapters as soon as possible

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1111hhh

like novels with a system and this one, from what I've seen, is also good. Keep uploading more chapters like you've been doing right now. like novels with a system and this one, from what I've seen, is also good. Keep uploading more chapters like you've been doing right now.

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opnlendayk7019

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gkkk_4231

I love the novel, the system is rejected, it continues to have more chapters, very well for what you have written so far.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

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Estefanie1738383

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Challman

you need to fix the chapter that didn't show up in your story in English it looks like it is in Spanish I can't understand the story thanks to it.