How Did The Zombie Game Become Real?!

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Lord_Cane

This story have much potential and interesting premise. It just need some work in grammar and editing, and it would be golden! The MC Ken have a pretty relatable and good personality. I also like the other characters so far, except of course the bad ones like Jaeha. The development of the virus is also interesting. Keep it up, author! I'll be watching out for further developments on the system

AMAZING!! the first chapter was kind of bland but the second !!! maaannnn!! it got really interested by the end any body reading this please give it a try .. and try to finish the second ep.. just a suggestion tho

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A_Valentine

I don't know if you're first language is english, but either way you could use some grammar, punction and general improvement. Grammarly is a good resource if you're an english native or fluent. Overall, its a general zombie apocalypse with the anime tropes someone who expect.

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RyujiSakamata

About my honest critique about this, the dialogues are all over the place. It's pretty confusing since it harbors punctuation and grammatical errors. The characters and the character moments are properly portrayed, but since it's still lacking chapters, so I can't see the significance yet. Maybe you should enhance the plot points for the next chapters to enhance the reader's retention. Keep up the good work, author.

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Somebody6666

I would say the story has a lot of potential, and the theme has been trendy recently. However, it needs being revised at the matter of writation and punctuation. Please go on write and revise later lol give me more chaps author-sensei 🤌🏻

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Junethephatcat

Well picked theme for your novel! It is trendy and very addicting to read. I also love how far your writing style progressed in just 3 chapters.

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Knightofthedead

The novel is interesting add more chapters please. Because if you do you will gain a great audience. Also the first chapter was bit bland but the second chapter was good

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Ranias_Heaven

I liked the way you write without mentioning grammar and stuff, just the way you deliver the words to reach us readers and feel alive as if we are inside the story chapters living with the characters same as they are doing so well , I felt I was part of it , like inside until now and the moment I finish the chapters i'm back to real life but still with the effect these chapters leave on me , that's how effective it is , and I love the characters development and the events progress and especially especially how you mixed between the game and real life and switched it was so cool I can't wait to read more , keep up the good work 💜💕👌