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Kaori never signed up to be a ninja, in fact, her business had just started to show signs of success when she was thrown into the world of Naruto. All she wanted was a normal life, a cup of lukewarm tea, and maybe a pet pug... won't say no to a couple of millions. But here she was, somehow inducted into the ANBU's Barrier and Security department – a guaranteed low-key job of being stealthy and keeping tabs on some unimportant lamb. Except the world seemed hellbent on making her life a living hell.
Then came the card system – now, she can collect cards that grants jutsus, tools, rare bloodline abilities, and even... people. Talk about a game changer! The gears in Kaori's mind started to turn. Maybe, just maybe, she could carve out her own little force, a small ninja army that could ensure that she survives the world-ending wars each Friday, and maybe even get a decent retirement.
Her new mission seemed promising enough – a simple surveillance job.
"It's a simple enough job, all you have to do is keep an eye on someone."
"Who?"
"Oh, no one important... just Kushina Uzumaki."
"...Who?"
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currently on chapter 10 and the story has potential. hope it won't get dropped early[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
This fic have period jokes Like we don't have enough of that from wanne be flop female so called comedian who flop after 1-2 YouTube video ........... ........... ........... ........... ........... ........... ...........
Solo una cosa kaori no es la protagonista sino su subordinado aiko dejen les explico el sistema le da habilidades y linage y que es lo que quiere hacer empoderar a otra persona y no a ella eso en sí no es tan malo si fuera solo suficiente mente fuerte para no morir pero solo es un chunnin mientras aiko es un estudiante eso no cuadra
30 Chapters in and its just a crackfic. The MC doesn't need to be OP right away but all the author does is make her banter with the system and act like an idiot. Nothing about this fanfic is serious and everything is treated like a joke. Crackfics are just not my cup of tea and author should probably put that it is one in the synopsis. etc etc MC is also an idiot.
This book is really good i like how the story is progressing I can't wait for Kaoti to take over the ANBU.
Noice... But it could really do with some fight scenes right about now. Not the MC getting pummled by Kushina but genuine bloodshed and organs eipping apart, chopped limbs and something nice like that.
Reveal SpoilerAt first I thought it would be one of those, dozens of subordinate being summoned from cards kind of novel... But it turns out its a nerfed card system, or it might be that the MC has yet to actually earn any card other than the gift pack. The plots nice, slow and easy... Like a nara. Chapter length is slowly going down, around 1k or 1.2k words... What? You thought I won't notice? 😒 Updates are stable over the past week. You used a bit of AI with the ANBU meeting and the war announcement right? Don't, your original content (The starting and Kushina's interaction) are nice and fun.
Reveal SpoilerSinseramente a protagonista nem parece uma protagonista e o sistema é uma porcaria, eu lembre claramente do sistema dizendo que não ia mudar a aparência e acabou mudando
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it's okay i guess pretty good but the charachter is kinda Like a Kid so it's Not really my novel
I’ve tried reading further than I got, but I just can’t get into it. I have a few points of contention that took me out of the story that I feel I should be mentioned in my critique. The main character, despite at first seeming like someone who would succeed, ended up becoming someone else completely once she awoke some memories for her new life. It would be understandable to have made changes to her character as she got accustomed to her memories, it felt like the reincarnation wasn’t even needed in the first place, as the nonestablished personality of her previous life either didn’t carry over, or is the same, in which case my aforementioned point still resides. Furthermore, the further you get into the story proper, the more nonsensical it becomes. Even with justifying reasons given later on, it feels flimsy, as the execution and build up leaves much to be desired. The MC’s justification and reasoning of her actions could be excused if not for her very much sentient system which answers her questions on nearly everything, and informs her of when it can’t, of which she knows it can do and has done before. As for the reactions to her actions, they have little to no consequence aside from some suspicion and other characters vouching for her despite being a supposed nobody as was mentioned in her evaluation and seen in her memories. It feels as though she’s the main character of the story, rather than the protagonist of the story. The MC, while having the character flaw of making stupid decisions, didn’t lack common sense until the bloodline assimilation, which could be excused, but the Uzumaki aren’t stupid. Naruto and to an extent Kushina are very much outliers among the them due to their upbringings. The events that followed proceeded to make a mockery of the Character seemingly for laughs. She previously mentioned in a previous chapter that Kushina followed her around like a duckling, seemingly (in my mind) hinting that Kushina looked up to her, and saw her as someone to be friends with, or someone she’s comfortable around. It proceeds to be retconned as then new information arose in that She and Mikoto saw MC as a big sister and then “had” her give them free candies and food because of it. It feels shallow to have Kushina and Mikoto victimize her like that, and without a thorough explanation aside from a cursory explanation, they don’t feel like siblings. They feel like strangers taking advantage of a civilian nobody. When MC was outed to Kushina as a member of ANBU, it was understandable she’d be mad her “big sister” didn’t tell her, but considering she is a jinchuriki as well as a shinobi, she’d ought to know that MC literally couldn’t tell her because her station forbids it. Forcing MC to apologize for something she had no control over and even threatening to pound her head into mash is vile and doesn’t fit well with the Kushina that was being hinted at in the previous chapters. Finally, after cliche tropes like being afraid of Kushina for no apparent reason other than her famous temper, or the system constantly badmouthing her for no given reason, I decided to quit while I’m ahead. My location lead me and ended at Chapter 17, so I can’t accurately state if it got better the longer it went on, to which I hope it did, as the premise and summary got me here in the first place. I’m just disappointed I couldn’t see it through to the end. Note that this is not in anyway supposed to be hate or slander. This is just my personal opinion and analysis of the story that I had read. I haven’t seen any comments with constructive criticism, and I’m hoping this review helps with that. If it doesn’t, well it’s whatever. As long as criticism exists and is present, you can improve your story. TL;DR: It went from a story with promise, to a subpar crackfic with a hint of greatness, and an untouched pile of potential. Do with this what you will. Opinions differ, and as I have stated that this isn’t a definitive conclusion nor fact, I expect that to be taken in account rather than disregard my points because of opinionated reasoning. In fact, others might think I’m completely wrong or that I misread/misunderstood/misinterpreted what was mentioned/written. But the fact remains in that this is what my impression of the writing gave me. We may disagree on my points, but that doesn’t mean that it’s irrelevant because of it. Have a good day, and continue writing and improving. This review shouldn’t discourage you from completing your story. So long as the quality improves, no matter what is said, that is all that matters. I could even have the same problems with this story in the future, but as long as it’s fleshed out and makes sense, it would be a good problem rather than an actual one. TL;DR: Keep writing and improving, take criticism into consideration and forge ahead.
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Great book really enjoyed it, hope for more in the future :D