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If I tell about story then its one of the best dc x invincible fanfics but after author dropped this fanfic because of a stupid reason i was just disappointed and if he had drop without saying anything i wouldn't be so disappointed but just hearing his reason..... alas it was one of the gems that i found but was unfortunately dropped hope author can re think about continuing the fanfic
Não do FL do FL cm FL USB,............................................................................. Juan hhhdhjdndnsbbsbshjsjjsjsmsmsmsmsmmsms
Good story, but unfortunately the "author" had his homophobic awakening while writing it... He became so afraid of gays, that their mere existence in DC, is somehow gonna make him a "sinner" by just writing his MC in said world (without ever mentioning anything about 1.gays 2.their relations 3.or even their existence in his work) Anyway read this or just the last chapter, if you are curious to see someone that the literal meaning of homophobia applies to, it was kind of facinating seeing such a case.
No matter how good this novel is don’t get your hopes up , author has a lot of excuses for dropping his novel and it’s not even good excuses, anyways story is aight just know author treats his novels like a piece of shit
Love the novel and hope someone else picks this up and continues writing. The Author wants to drop it since he just "found god." That is one of if not the most disgusting thing someone can say. Author is dropping it since DC/Invincible comics have characters that are gay and it goes against his religion since he just found god. Respectfully author never write a novel again since you will just keep disappointing people. One tip before I leave, don't let religion tell you what you can read or write about. It's your life and I doubt god would care.....
Love the novel and hope someone else picks this up and continues writing. The Author wants to drop it since he just "found god." That is one of if not the most disgusting thing someone can say. Author is dropping it since DC/Invincible comics have characters that are gay and it goes against his religion since he just found god. Respectfully author never write a novel again since you will just keep disappointing people. One tip before I leave, don't let religion tell you what you can read or write about. It's your life and I doubt god would care.....
can you give a vampire like ability to be able to pass on some of his power to people he cares about like how a vampire bite can make other a vampire as well you can make some adjustments to this ability to make it more inline with the story
This story is main pitfall is it’s focus. Mainly the focus on power and relationships. The relationships or not why we read superhero stories. At least not romantic relationships. In most stories like this the relationships are at minimum tertiary. The villains, the plot, the setting, the powerset, or the intrigue are all more important than the romantic drama. It almost reads like a harem fic. The second issue is the powerset. I’m not gonna lie. I actually love it but to make it better I think he got a tone down a bit. His power should grow in conjunction with the story, because if he could solve all his problems with his powers, what would you write about? Another thing is that has powers that is mostly growing alone and that’s kind of uninteresting in the fic of the DC/invincible universe.
great idea with potential but just scaling of power to fast, scaling power of enemy to strong and no developpement of character with zero interaction with other character. over 30 chapter and just 3 interaction but overall no developpement
Chapter 33 ANOTHER YAPP SESH!!!! Pros: 1) Portrayal of characters is pretty good and understandable 2) A pretty thought out reason for a majority of things 3) Really great start and hook Cons: 1) the increase in strength is too fast and ruins a lot of plot opportunities IMO. For ex; he trained in knife skills and he gets to the level of professional in a few weeks 2) not much world exploring beside going to gotham and then starlight city 3) The DC & Invincible(especially) main cast were not used or explored enough and all we have seen is just the mc going to fodders and gaining powers 4) the nano machine abilities further down were too OP imo 5) not a lot of struggle after the superman blood thingy( I think this was when things started getting boring and out of hand for me) Expectations starting out: 1) more struggle with growth in skills and strength 2) exploration of other places like altantis or the other pantheons of mythology 3) struggling with accepting his new reality( not a lot of fanfic do this so this is more preference than anything) 4) a lot of martials are being created and used Disappointments: 1) I did not see a lot of mention of martial arts being used and explained( I had this expectation because of the manhwa) 2) Little use of the invincible cast( we are not that far into the fic but I would’ve like to see more invincible) 3) Progression in the story got stale after a while because all I was seeing were numbers going up and not enough story telling about the world or the characters. Take it how you will and hopefully I see improvements as well as more of your fics.
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Author wants an OP protagonist but also wants to nerf him, wants to use specific numbers to quantify the strength and speed of the character but doesn't understand what these numbers entail, wants a heroic MC that saves people and is reluctant to kill street thugs but is totally okay with genocide. For a webnovel it's above average.
Muy bueno la verdad gracias muy op al Incio y la verdad algo trillado de la sangre de superman y la verdad los nanomachines son muy útiles más de lo que se plantea buen novel sigue así
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So is the Mc going to continue dating amber/ eventually marry her or going to break up soon. I would personally like a solo story with the interaction dc, and invincible character. Just my opinion.
The premise is interesting and would have made for a great read if it was not for the use of ai in it's creation, the horribly described scenes with illogical words has turned me from this story. The use of ai has degraded the writting so much so that I couldn't finish a single chapter, author please use your brain and select the appropriate words for each description, avoid describing the tone/ feelings of the charactors and show what they are feeling through action, don't overdescribe, use telling to denote long stretches of time that would have been boring for the reader, only use ai to correct your grammar, otherwise the story will end up feeling like it was written by an idiot with no idea how to use the english language to write a story.
Definitely should be more popular then it is. Definitely top 2 DC ff on here I actually like this more then the other one but doesn’t have enough chapters yet to cement itself as the best for but story wise it’s way better.
[img=Cries][img=Feeling it][img=Envy][img=Good night][img=In your face][img=Mad][img=Loving it][img=More pls][img=Sigh][img=Shocked][img=Smitten][img=Out of it][img=Smug][img=Unalived][img=Why]
I'm still trying to figure out how invincible adds into this but overall I love this.
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Nano machine is it for the novel if so then i hope you don't disappear and don't mess up the fic like nano machine has so much potential i don't know why other author's don't use it.
Really well written story and an interesting premise, I would have love to continue reading, but *SPOILER* I’m not that into power hoarding fics, although it’s a cool concept the idea of him running around stealing people’s powers doesn’t interest me much. It’s still a really good story and I’d recommend it to anyone.
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I think its really good until now the grammar is good and the system is cool as well i reallllly like it................................................
good enough so far good grammar, interesting development and long enough word count per chapter, need more simplified stat don't know how to do it tho😆 but good enough with the comparison. hope it's a 100+ chapter and keep up the interesting development even if it's a slow pace one.
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I would personally change the name he chose for the fight just because it is kinda overused(thanks to oversaturation of edgelord MCs) maybe something more unique to him and his situation would be good. Other than that the explanation the pacing and everything points toward a great novel in the works..... Will update this chapter after more chapter( though i don't think it will deviate much from my current one).
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A great story so far. The pacing is pretty ok, sometimes it's fast but most of the time it takes its time. There are some grammar mistakes here and there, but they aren't much of a problem for any typical reader of web novels. The main character is pretty chill. He doesn't take stupid risks from what I can tell, even though he makes mistakes sometimes. He's quite cool, on another hand, his design is simple. The main character is powerful as well, and a hard worker who trains efficiently with his friend ECHO. He gains powers, but not willy-nilly either. He chooses from those he wants from now, not like he was at the beginning of the series... He isn't grossly powerful, but he is a force to be reckoned with. In a sense, he's just extremely strong Next, the world background seems decent so far, It isn't the best, but it is growing from what I can tell, so props to the author for that. The characters don't seem forced when they speak. It's pretty believable in fact, so double props. Chapters are quite long, averaging about 2-3k words per chapter, so content takes a while to run out of. Overall the story is pretty good to read, and if you like slow-mid pace fics with decent power progression and storytelling. For now, it seems like the story might be developing, but who knows, definitely not me[img=Smitten][img=proud]
If I tell about story then its one of the best dc x invincible fanfics but after author dropped this fanfic because of a stupid reason i was just disappointed and if he had drop without saying anything i wouldn't be so disappointed but just hearing his reason..... alas it was one of the gems that i found but was unfortunately dropped hope author can re think about continuing the fanfic
Não do FL do FL cm FL USB,............................................................................. Juan hhhdhjdndnsbbsbshjsjjsjsmsmsmsmsmmsms
Good story, but unfortunately the "author" had his homophobic awakening while writing it... He became so afraid of gays, that their mere existence in DC, is somehow gonna make him a "sinner" by just writing his MC in said world (without ever mentioning anything about 1.gays 2.their relations 3.or even their existence in his work) Anyway read this or just the last chapter, if you are curious to see someone that the literal meaning of homophobia applies to, it was kind of facinating seeing such a case.
No matter how good this novel is don’t get your hopes up , author has a lot of excuses for dropping his novel and it’s not even good excuses, anyways story is aight just know author treats his novels like a piece of shit
Love the novel and hope someone else picks this up and continues writing. The Author wants to drop it since he just "found god." That is one of if not the most disgusting thing someone can say. Author is dropping it since DC/Invincible comics have characters that are gay and it goes against his religion since he just found god. Respectfully author never write a novel again since you will just keep disappointing people. One tip before I leave, don't let religion tell you what you can read or write about. It's your life and I doubt god would care.....
Love the novel and hope someone else picks this up and continues writing. The Author wants to drop it since he just "found god." That is one of if not the most disgusting thing someone can say. Author is dropping it since DC/Invincible comics have characters that are gay and it goes against his religion since he just found god. Respectfully author never write a novel again since you will just keep disappointing people. One tip before I leave, don't let religion tell you what you can read or write about. It's your life and I doubt god would care.....
can you give a vampire like ability to be able to pass on some of his power to people he cares about like how a vampire bite can make other a vampire as well you can make some adjustments to this ability to make it more inline with the story
This story is main pitfall is it’s focus. Mainly the focus on power and relationships. The relationships or not why we read superhero stories. At least not romantic relationships. In most stories like this the relationships are at minimum tertiary. The villains, the plot, the setting, the powerset, or the intrigue are all more important than the romantic drama. It almost reads like a harem fic. The second issue is the powerset. I’m not gonna lie. I actually love it but to make it better I think he got a tone down a bit. His power should grow in conjunction with the story, because if he could solve all his problems with his powers, what would you write about? Another thing is that has powers that is mostly growing alone and that’s kind of uninteresting in the fic of the DC/invincible universe.
great idea with potential but just scaling of power to fast, scaling power of enemy to strong and no developpement of character with zero interaction with other character. over 30 chapter and just 3 interaction but overall no developpement
Chapter 33 ANOTHER YAPP SESH!!!! Pros: 1) Portrayal of characters is pretty good and understandable 2) A pretty thought out reason for a majority of things 3) Really great start and hook Cons: 1) the increase in strength is too fast and ruins a lot of plot opportunities IMO. For ex; he trained in knife skills and he gets to the level of professional in a few weeks 2) not much world exploring beside going to gotham and then starlight city 3) The DC & Invincible(especially) main cast were not used or explored enough and all we have seen is just the mc going to fodders and gaining powers 4) the nano machine abilities further down were too OP imo 5) not a lot of struggle after the superman blood thingy( I think this was when things started getting boring and out of hand for me) Expectations starting out: 1) more struggle with growth in skills and strength 2) exploration of other places like altantis or the other pantheons of mythology 3) struggling with accepting his new reality( not a lot of fanfic do this so this is more preference than anything) 4) a lot of martials are being created and used Disappointments: 1) I did not see a lot of mention of martial arts being used and explained( I had this expectation because of the manhwa) 2) Little use of the invincible cast( we are not that far into the fic but I would’ve like to see more invincible) 3) Progression in the story got stale after a while because all I was seeing were numbers going up and not enough story telling about the world or the characters. Take it how you will and hopefully I see improvements as well as more of your fics.
Reveal Spoiler Author wants an OP protagonist but also wants to nerf him, wants to use specific numbers to quantify the strength and speed of the character but doesn't understand what these numbers entail, wants a heroic MC that saves people and is reluctant to kill street thugs but is totally okay with genocide. For a webnovel it's above average.
Muy bueno la verdad gracias muy op al Incio y la verdad algo trillado de la sangre de superman y la verdad los nanomachines son muy útiles más de lo que se plantea buen novel sigue así
Reveal Spoiler So is the Mc going to continue dating amber/ eventually marry her or going to break up soon. I would personally like a solo story with the interaction dc, and invincible character. Just my opinion.
The premise is interesting and would have made for a great read if it was not for the use of ai in it's creation, the horribly described scenes with illogical words has turned me from this story. The use of ai has degraded the writting so much so that I couldn't finish a single chapter, author please use your brain and select the appropriate words for each description, avoid describing the tone/ feelings of the charactors and show what they are feeling through action, don't overdescribe, use telling to denote long stretches of time that would have been boring for the reader, only use ai to correct your grammar, otherwise the story will end up feeling like it was written by an idiot with no idea how to use the english language to write a story.
Definitely should be more popular then it is. Definitely top 2 DC ff on here I actually like this more then the other one but doesn’t have enough chapters yet to cement itself as the best for but story wise it’s way better.
[img=Cries][img=Feeling it][img=Envy][img=Good night][img=In your face][img=Mad][img=Loving it][img=More pls][img=Sigh][img=Shocked][img=Smitten][img=Out of it][img=Smug][img=Unalived][img=Why]
I'm still trying to figure out how invincible adds into this but overall I love this.
Esta decente...................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Nano machine is it for the novel if so then i hope you don't disappear and don't mess up the fic like nano machine has so much potential i don't know why other author's don't use it.
Really well written story and an interesting premise, I would have love to continue reading, but *SPOILER* I’m not that into power hoarding fics, although it’s a cool concept the idea of him running around stealing people’s powers doesn’t interest me much. It’s still a really good story and I’d recommend it to anyone.
Reveal Spoiler I think its really good until now the grammar is good and the system is cool as well i reallllly like it................................................
good enough so far good grammar, interesting development and long enough word count per chapter, need more simplified stat don't know how to do it tho😆 but good enough with the comparison. hope it's a 100+ chapter and keep up the interesting development even if it's a slow pace one.
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I would personally change the name he chose for the fight just because it is kinda overused(thanks to oversaturation of edgelord MCs) maybe something more unique to him and his situation would be good. Other than that the explanation the pacing and everything points toward a great novel in the works..... Will update this chapter after more chapter( though i don't think it will deviate much from my current one).
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A great story so far. The pacing is pretty ok, sometimes it's fast but most of the time it takes its time. There are some grammar mistakes here and there, but they aren't much of a problem for any typical reader of web novels. The main character is pretty chill. He doesn't take stupid risks from what I can tell, even though he makes mistakes sometimes. He's quite cool, on another hand, his design is simple. The main character is powerful as well, and a hard worker who trains efficiently with his friend ECHO. He gains powers, but not willy-nilly either. He chooses from those he wants from now, not like he was at the beginning of the series... He isn't grossly powerful, but he is a force to be reckoned with. In a sense, he's just extremely strong Next, the world background seems decent so far, It isn't the best, but it is growing from what I can tell, so props to the author for that. The characters don't seem forced when they speak. It's pretty believable in fact, so double props. Chapters are quite long, averaging about 2-3k words per chapter, so content takes a while to run out of. Overall the story is pretty good to read, and if you like slow-mid pace fics with decent power progression and storytelling. For now, it seems like the story might be developing, but who knows, definitely not me[img=Smitten][img=proud]