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Marly isn't your average girl. She's rich and she likes to defy her father and she loves to party. But what happens when her defiance leads to big time trouble for her and her friends?
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Marly has a life filled with perfection with a rich family and rich supportive friends.
Oh and don't forget about the rich boyfriend to top it all off.
Her life is amazing, until it's not.
She takes a trip to the tropical island in Cartagena, Colombia hoping for a fun party- filled beach trip, but instead it turns from having an awesome time at an island to having 2 hours to escape the island and madness of a family nemesis.
Will Marly and her friends be able to escape the island or will they be killed before they even go to their last prom?
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I honestly found this book to have a much better writing quality than I expected. The synopsis makes you seem like you have poor grammar since the punctuation is wrong. I suggest you to fix it and perhaps add some more to it as well. Another thing, is one of the mc's name Marly or Mary? In the title, you call her Mary, but in the chapter, you called her Marly. There's nothing much that I can say about the story development yet since the story has barely started, but I think you should connect your povs better since you switch every chapter. I think this story has huge potential, good luck, author! :)
Personally, I find it quite difficult to form an opinion on a story while only two chapters are out, therefore I decided to simply formulate my first impression of the intro. The opening lines are engaging enough to read on, but they are not compelling enough to completely capture my intertest. As I was reading, I thirsted for more information of the direct surroundings as there was no real atmosphere created for the reader to get absorbed in. The characters are not that appealing. This is not necessary, of course, as that may not be what the author intends. Nevertheless, in my opinion, they appear very childish and over the top,— again, perhaps a distinct choice of the author but they do not capture my sympathy. I hope I did not dissuade you from continuing, as I do see potential in this story. We can only, after all, improve with practice.
Really interesting I love it, that was a good job there author the plotting of the story is pretty unique, kudos to you author that was a good job.
The intricacy of the writing hooked me. Prose and narration are conveyed beautifully, which reminds of some book I’ve read in the library about a Fey back in the days. Anyhow, I can’t really critique much due to only two chapters present at hand. However I do suggest focusing on character description. It is important that the readers get immersed to the characters in order to ‘feel’ them. But then again the book is still on its early stages. Keep up the good work.
Well the writing quality is great The novel starts with a guy getting slapped so I am guessing there will be a lot of face slapping Who know looking forward to the next chapter
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Writing Quality -The use of uncommon descriptive words adds a touch of interest to the book. -The writing style kept me captivated -It is unique and extraordinary Update -I'll rate it five stars cause why not? World Background -Amazing, the world background was described perfectly. -It gives interest to the reader Character -I love the characters. -The author has profoundly described the attributes of every character involved in the story. -The way the author describes the characters is unique and unusual. Story Development -So far, I can't decide on this since it only has two chapters but I'll rate it five stars cause why not?
I like the way of your writing, but try to explain your character more other than this I like the plot of the story and the way you write the dialogue is also good. #Good-work
It’s awesome. The story is centered on the characters so very little world building is known. I hope by later, you’ll fix it. Seems this novel has a short summary an but wat gives, I enjoyed the mystery of hazel eyes. My mind just kept screaming “he’s a snake and he’s going to eat you... Runnn.” Nice one... don’t drop