Devourer in Naruto

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Weyri

Currently, at chapter 7 and it's enough to know I must drop this, no character building for the MC until his first battle and near-death experience, you expect us to wish for him to live like that? Talking about that moment, it's just so bad. He was excited about the fight and killing, but can't accept being in danger. He didn't even use his perks before that to grow, and you save him with BS, the higher beings have far too much importance so soon, everything smell poor righting and no, the MC is born before other fanfic doesn't make it original. Thanks and goodbye.

LV 2

iliketosleep

(Currently 7 chapters out at the moment, may change review later.) btw i think you meant “expect the novel itself to not be of outstanding quality”

LV 2

SAGE

I use translate on google so I don't have a problem with your English and I like the story, for that, I will wait for the chapter's good job author

LV 3

Lostintales

I love this please don't drop this author. ................................................................. .................................................................. . .

LV 4

olympaforged

I enjoy the story but there is so many things dragging this down. your MC age is all over thr place, and even the time.of things is allover the. I think before you get too deep into the story you should look over all your chapters and straighten things out.

LV 3

IlIlIlIlIl

pretty good start ..............................................................................................................................................................................

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Gd_Sys

Moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeerreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

LV 4

Lucy_Carla

1. i thought ROB will grant his wish and then leave him alone, but actually there string attached... well, at least MC can enjoy feeling Overpowered and Above All for a while.. 2. you should clarify how his bloodline work, is in dormant state, partial awaken or fully awaken ?? is it his body contain 100% pure human blood, 50% human 50% alien, or 100% alien blood ?? many readers think he can easily control state of his bloodline from dormant to fully awaken and they confused or they just too lazy to think (like me) ... 3. i know mc doesnot have feeling with mito but you write her side chapter, make her fond mc, they grew each other, help each other, compete with her rival, even his mother give her blessing but in the end she marry hashirama... if u say he treat it just pure friend relationship, then i feel sad for him because his denseness...

LV 2

MarkinBitchs

its good[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

LV 1

zither_immortal

dumb the mc is dum. No brain only Muscle..................... ..................................... .......................................

LV 4

Mrmore

Enjoy reading it ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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monke_egg_man

ir's cool BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSS

LV 4

FrEeZe

Great overall but would like a better updating [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]

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jaro_onody

nice very intressting

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Battel_C

Good. jjjj K y j j Stupid.

LV 3

Diabolo3

Cool but pls Update damit

LV 13

Dio_The_Sage

for word count .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. .. ..

LV 13

Yau_Owusu_Boadu

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