Dragon Heart System

LV 1

JinVonRey

I am leaving this to all readers, I will be counting on your criticizing reviews to improve the story. If you by any chance have read a chapter and felt that something off, wrong, or simply didn't like, I hope you will spare the time to tell me what do you think! I really hope to see the day this story will be thriving and I hope that you will be the one to help shape it.

LV 1

Lost_Ling

Honest opinion here, as what you've requested. There are a couple minor errors in your writing, as I believe you don't double check each entire chapter thoroughly, so if possible I think you should focus more on that. Stability of updates seems to be great as I see 2 chapters per day, but you've only been writing for 3 days now so I can't give you a full 5 star yet. Story development seems fine as of now, still not giving a 5 star as It's still too early to decide. Character design seems hmm.. the mc seems to be a little too smart and he's using terms that country siders wouldn't know that much about. His background story seems also kinda rushed and it is kind of overused, the whole village/place whatever getting slaughtered and mc falling into despair but its fine still. World background seems to be good, I gave it a 5 star. And another thing is the whole system the dragon gave to Simon. It's a little complicated and stuffy, kinda hard to read. I'd rather much prefer you simplifying it down a little. Along with the stat points things, I honestly didn't know much of what was happening with all that math lol. Just here trying to have a late night read, anyways good luck on your novel mate! It has potential.

LV 5

Dieudonner_17

I said i wont review till at least 20 chapters but i have to do this Great story nice story Exculdimg the grammar errors you make im every chapter (try reviewing though as a human you aint perfect) everything is dope Please dont spoil it and drop it

LV 1

Albert_pause

The story so far is still good, at the start I expected a lone wolf story with Simon chasing whoever did that to his village but instead we are now in a military school? I don't hate the twist but I hoped for a more power fantasy. There are also a lot of grammar problems, it didn't put me off though as I got a laugh of it. Sorry author.