Eden’s Multiverse Journey

LV 2

Literopat

I started reading only for the sake of High School of the Dead and Arifureta, but in the end it was a disappointment. The two good universes flew by too fast, they were shown too superficially and clumsily. I'm not even talking about the characters, they are all without vivid character traits, ordinary cheap dummies and unmemorable, not at all what they were in the original.

LV 3

Kukroki

Still don't understand how it got over a million readers without 10 reviewers of this fanfic (if you include me, 10) even though it's been over a year since it was released.

LV 4

Oji_san_ecchi

your novel is good in my opinion, but unfortunately the impression of the story is too forced and too rushed, a whereas in the world of Arifureta if the writer thinks carefully you can make more than 50 chapters without depending on the canon, such as traveling or traveling around the world of Arifureta or adding followers or slaves, or you can also eliminate the False god.... and when in the HOTD world it also seems too forced, basically everything looks too forced so it's a bit disgusting or cringy when you read it, I hope you take this FF novel seriously again, even though the MC background is good but what I don't like is about the storyline process what the author told me about, so I hope that in the future it will be improved again!!

LV 5

jeanpierregerardo

more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter , more chapter .

LV 1

Taragorm

Being nice first the author gets better over time, the mc is likeable enough and the idea is good. However I honestly cannot give this a higher score the first world is a dog's breakfast needs a serious rewrite its all good that it gets better but the first two worlds are kinda from two of my favourite intellectual properties. So that already sours my opinion from the get go. The whole fanfic fundamentally makes zero sense what so ever. The mc is literally God why even bother world hoping for a harem when he can create one, world, women and all. The mc has the three big O,s the whole one above all package . Putting myself in the mc shoes if I gained all that power it would fundamentally change me yet the mc is no different from before his death. Being one above all kinda means he knows everything is everywhere and is everything being essentially above it all. so why should he be going to a world at all when he's already there. would of worked better going a creation angle. Writing is hard, writing a god as mc is really hard, antagonists are pointless, Mcs desires are a snap of the fingers away, the only way of showing conflict, character growth and interesting developments are with exploring the main characters mindset and the effects he has on the world around him as in Overlord which is an op character done right.

LV 13

srevdar

Reached chapter 6 and I think it's a good point to write a first impression... The writing seems good and easy to read so I have no issues there, but one think I dislike so far is the flow of the story... you went too fast my dude, and the dialogue I would have liked to read is not there... instead we have a quick summary. The romance so far is underwhelming... the reason for that is that only Aya has any kind of intro that isn't a few lines. You should have had some more detailed intros for new characters. Now the characters... the MC is supposed to be OAA and he uses his power to insert himself into the story... honestly I've seen this premise soooooo many times it does nothing for me. (Personaly the first thin I woyld do is kill of Kouki or at least do something to him... I never did understand the NEED to follow the original story when you're writing a fanfic) Arifureta is a great first world, but honestly you should have dedicated at least 2-3 chapters to world building and explaing the world to those that never read about it before... I'm satisfied for now so I will keep reading. A bit of advice if you write another story: FIRST IMPRESSION MATTERS!!!! Not many people have the patience like me to continue, even if the atory gets good later on. Keep it up 😁

LV 4

Thigh_Master0124

Story: 2 Character: 3 Others: 5 So uhh... Pretty plain to be honest I am only at first 10 or so chapters and I find story plain and too rapid paced. Like author won't let me read how they talked with each other and skips all the communication. And this is too rapid faced. Romance is ****. I understand that you will improve but still I will write it here and I will write another review when you reach 100 chapters. And people can see how much you improved. My advice for author: Please improve romance and don't overload cringiness.

LV 3

Vitrialia_Amermes

I gave 5 star ,why you asking . first you do what you want,like become one above all !! that's already op . So you follow your heart but I remind you something . Don't forget other girl because I know this will become massive harem afterl all . Even issei that before one above all have 3 billion wife and I don't even remember if someone dont mention her like grayfia third wife of issei only in beginning after that there no more grayfia !!! like mc forget her so don't do that here . that's all from me because I already read many fanfic and know how to give you some advise

LV 12

Nontr

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LV 4

Lucifer515

Good novel

LV 1

Primordiality

First Arc was a rushed as it seems it was the authors first time writing, but it was honestly a good read after that. giving 4 stars for the harem and hope that the story gets even better.