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My first writing experience. The book is going to be bad. Yup i said it. I hope to see a gradual betterment in my writing so if you don’t have anything constructive to say, don’t say anything.
For those that call it a ripoff. Well, i am trying to change the story gradually plus its a Fan-fiction. ITS SUPPOSED TO BE A RIPOFF. Enjoy if you want to.
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There are grammar and spelling errors but they aren't so bad that you can't figure out what the author means. I like the story but there are times at the start where the MC is doing things at the age of 6 that he wouldn't be able to get away with when interacting with adults around him. No one is going to give a 4 year old child a job. Sadly it seems that the author has dropped this before anything can get started, like so many others who start these ff.
If it was possible i would have given negative stars on this review. This is basically power fantasy writen by 10 year old without any internal logic or sense.
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Im being very generous here with 2 stars. this Fic is almos the same as another Harry Potter fic. started Out the same as the other fic also.
Using my authors power to wGet 5 stars. Oknow i am writing this as a stress relief so I think it will be quite consistent. Now that shows You hpw much stress i have Anywho, english isnt my firslt language so be gentlE and any recommendations are acceptable
The story is nice however it would be much better if the story was updated at certain times. Please excuse this- ...................................................................................................................................................................................................It was so I could pass the 140 letter mark.
the story is very good as well the background if you make the Mc more Evil it will be much better in my humble opinion
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Just an average Harry Potter ff with flaws like everything else, tho the writing suggests either a non native speaker that is 10 years old or someone who just doesn't know how to write properly since most errors can be fixed with a simple proofread or Grammarly
It's alright, I suppose. My main issue is that the main character is very childish. I suppose it makes sense, given that he was died at age ten, but what I really don't like about him is that, despite his childishness, everyone respects him for his wisdom and maturity. It's an odd combo which I find difficult to enjoy.