MHA: The Quick Silver

LV 14

Kabuk5

The idea sounds interesting, but the grammar.... please use Grammarly and read the sentences out loud, it makes it easier to find mistakes in your paragraphs.

LV 14

AkiraLight

While the central concept is promising, the writing style presents significant challenges. The grammar and sentence structure are notably problematic, which can disrupt the flow of understanding for the reader. The absence of a third-person perspective in the narrative limits the portrayal of events to the character's viewpoint, making it challenging to build a comprehensive picture of the story's world. Additionally, the lack of emotional depth in the writing further hinders the reader's ability to connect with the characters and their experiences. With a focus on improving grammar, exploring different perspectives, and infusing emotions into the narrative, the piece could evolve into a more engaging and immersive read.

LV 4

Samot_Sempai

very good ..............................

LV 3

Snipe_is_here

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LV 5

TyrantTron335

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LV 14

Kiiiddd

Grammar is a killer here,lots of stuff is hard to understand. But also it reads a bit like a report and not a story in quite a few places