Prototype: DO NOT READ

LV 10

A_person_4016

1st: Needs an introduction. You don't drop out new terms like zeus pooping out new kids. 2: Some grammar errors, but overall decent 3: some weird punctuation here and there. 4: Some ideas should be extended Good start. If you feel like you don't like the story and don't feel confident, ask a friend to beta-read. There are some other smaller issues but my webnovel app keeps crashing when I leave reviews and comments so i'll keep it short. Great start tho