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Nerridavahtah

This story has a good amount of tension and drama, mixed with well-defined characters and story. I can't wait to see where it goes.

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Darksiidde

Good novel so far. I hope the author does not change his line of reasoning during the course of the novel. In addition, for those who like of an MC who gradually develops emotionally and physically, searching for his own identity in a chaotic world, it is a great choice.

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Ethernal7

Things i would like the author to change/fix: A lot of things have no descriptions, or very vague ones. Even characters only have their descriptions brought up once, when some details should be repeated. The dialog doesn't play a big role, but it's poorly used. The POV and settings change rapidly with little indication of the change. This destroys emission, and makes the novel harder to understand. Haven't any world building yet, though there was a vague introduction to it. We're only five chapters in, so that's pretty good. No need to rush things. The author seems to update at a stable rate. Overall, the work has a lot of potential. The first paragraph shows great descriptions, and is a sign of how great this could be. If the author took the time to paint a full scene, and fixed the issues I mentioned above, this could truly be something special. To the author: Please consider my criticisms seriously. If you don't lose passion, you will make an amazing story, I'm sure of it. I believe that.

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BishopsNemesis

Initial thought: The writing quality appears to be solid, with clear and descriptive language that effectively conveys the events and emotions of the story. The story development thus far has introduced several interesting concepts, such as the concept of Aeter and Aeter beast companions, as well as the diverse magical races and continents of the world of Eos. The character design for the main character, Elias, seems well-rounded and his interactions with his family and Aeter beast companions are engaging and provide insight into his personality. The world background provided in these chapters is intriguing, with the introduction of different magical races and the concept of Aeter, but there is not yet enough information to fully evaluate the depth and complexity of the world-building. Overall, the first five chapters show promise and have left me interested in learning more about the story and world of this novel. Writing Quality: 4 Overall, the writing quality in this novel is good. The descriptions are detailed and vivid, and the dialogue between the characters is natural and flows well. There are a few instances where the writing feels a bit clunky or awkward, such as when Sophia is explaining the concept of Aeter companions to Elias. However, these instances are few and far between, and overall the writing is strong. Story Development: 4 (Went from 3 to 4 since I have wrote this review based on only 5 chapters.) While the story has potential, it feels like it is just starting to get going in these five chapters. The plot is introduced in a somewhat confusing way, with the main character seemingly remembering his past life and then using magic in an unexpected way. It's not entirely clear what the main conflict or goal of the story will be, though hints are given about the main character's parents being in danger. The pacing is also a bit slow, with much of the first few chapters devoted to world-building and character development. Character Design: 4 The characters in this novel are well-developed and have distinct personalities. Elias is a curious and mature child, Sophia is a strict yet caring grandmother, and Isaac is a boisterous and affectionate father. Aurora, the mother, is a bit more mysterious and seems to be hiding something from Elias. The Aeter beasts, Kyra and Otso, are also well-developed and have distinct personalities. Kyra is gentle and nurturing, while Otso is boisterous and playful. World Background: 5 The world-building in this novel is excellent. The continent of Acacia and its diverse races are described in great detail, and the concept of Aeter beasts and their role in society is explained clearly. The different magic elements and their applications are also well-explained, and the history of the world is hinted at through references to Gaia and Typhon. Overall, the world of Eos feels fully-realized and immersive.

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sujinphilip

Believe me when I say that I have never been so, i don't know how to say it, yes captivated by a novel before. Every single line is beautifully crafted and rich in detail. The growth of every characters from the first chapter is journey that kept ne on the edge of my seat. I can't wait to read more![img=recommend][img=update]

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Justin_Gabventure

I love the novel so far and I highly recommend it and assure you that you will be immersed in the wonderful, interesting and intriguing writings of this author

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PicatrixPuff

This is my honest review to the book. In my opinion the first chapter lacked of emotion... Your descriptions are on point and the balance is there, but the way characters react and the body language is not there. Focus a bit more on how they are feeling and why. Moving forward to the next chapters I saw a slight improvement in thatt direction, yet not much. The plot itself is really inspiring, your writing style is on point except the things I just mentioned. The action is slowly developing which is a plus for the people who rather would take the time to enjoy a good book. I would like to see a bit of challenges for the characters in order for you to build up their persona. They don't have to succeed every time. Show the struggle and how they evolve. People would love to see that a bit more often. You are a good writer and I can feel you really put a lot of effort into your book. I am waiting for a new chapter to see your improvement. Lots of love and hugs ~ Picatrixpuff

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Adam_Haddad

Great pilot chapter. Very impressive use of words to describe the situation in the opening paragraph. Additionally, it ends the chapter with an intriguing mystery.

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gnatrou

Although there are a bunch of aspects that set this story apart, it's still another of those somewhat generic "reborn as a baby and growing up" type of stories, which isn't bad by any means (there is a reason why it's so used, after all). They generally allow more time for character development/growth and even world-building to shift over the years, which the author utilizes quite well. The writing quality is excellent, with vivid imagery and a wonderful flow, although some occasional unnatural paragraphs exist, which is understandable with such consistent and fast chapter releases. Word choices are fantastic (such as using hazel instead of brown). The author could use more creative or figurative language, but by no means is it essential. Your story's got a lot of potential. Good luck and happy writing!

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Railvas

Great background and plot development. If you're into an intense story with detailed fighting scenes, you should give it a try. The story is often told in first person which lets us have short glimpses at MC's emotions and thoughts.

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Somebody6666

I would say I like how the author insert comedy into this extravagant story. However i wish more of world background description. Still a great story though and very page turning story!

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Aug_ust15

I was just scrolling and I saw this novel. It's beautiful and detailed and everything I need. If you're looking for something to get lost in, this is definitely it

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IntrovertedWriters

The use of advance words shows the writing skills of the author. a very nice story, which made me enjoy a lot.

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Anniasa_Uchiha

I fell in love with this story with the emotions running thought each character and I would love the author to show this more :) Give little bit more details and I still recommend this wonderful story it still has me wanting to cry

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ShadowAmeratsu

The novel has an impressive plot, with huge room to have the characters roam, but the pilot chapter seemed to lack emotion. It had great detail and amazing descriptions, but when it came to providing emotions or human body language, it didn't seem the best. I hope that it improves as it goes along, but I'm optimistic of its future :)

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JJ_Francis

Love the story! It has lots of interesting plot. Nicejob here author can't wait for more chapters

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PandoraGG

why did you remove 20+ chapter? also very good book 👍