Twilight: A Transmigration Story

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honeyseeto_03

Honest review of my own story. My plot and character design are definitely not worth 5 stars so I gave it 3 stars. I know there will be plot holes since I am an amateur writer but I hope the story is still somewhat enjoyable to those who read it.

Writing Quality 5* Updating Stability 4* Story Development 3* (Story pace is really really slow, and it usually takes 2-3 chapters for a concrete plot point to be established) Character Design 5* World Background 3* (Author has messed up the canon on several occasions and has narrowly avoided criticism for it because it’s “AU”, not much for worldbuilding but what is there is pretty good)

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Lackada1sical

Evaluation as of Ch#15: Average WQ: A couple of unnoticeable gramm errors which author-san is improving on. There's room for improvement when it comes to the structure of the story & portrayal of each schemes & plot. 3/5 SD: With a slow to average pace of development which greatly affects the story/MC progression that resulted in several plot holes. Too long winded. 3/5 CD: MC is a transmigrator but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are severely lacking. His powers are OP (Fire & lightning bending) but was nerfed as per your portrayal which is contradictory. Could've improved upon on MCs portrayal for better plot/MC progression. Lack of utilization when it comes to his previous life experiences & Twilight Verse knowledge he have. 3/5 US: Chapters are short, stability of update isn't up to speed & tons of redundancy. 3/5 WB: Nothing unusual since the story/plot is still in it's early stages. Could've explored more on his powers or earthly knowledge to add details or word count then combine it with the current TwilightVerse. 3/5 Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD

I love the idea behind the story, thus I would like to give this review to encourage the author more. all I ask for is, keep neutral opinion about characters, and make romance a bit slow, I get that soulmates is a heavy thing here; but ask yourself. is it really satisfying to see MC & Love Interest(Female Lead) entering relationship from the start? is it better than building relationship by getting to know each other before commetting to anything serious? I would feel the romance is empty if MC and Alice just start anything serious without taking all variables in consideration (start as classmates, have them chat with each other more often and build their friendship, let them share personal information with each other slowly before entering a romantic relationship by triggering a scene that is suitable for confession) this would make the romance solid imo. I would also like to know his good his control of Blue Fire & Lightning will be when canon start. (add some events of your own, cuz Twilight doesn't have much content to write a story with a decent length.

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jchappy

really really looking forward to this. I just hope it gets finished so many good twilight fanfics die so early. plus ALICE FOR THE WIN

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LemonSpatula

ill only join ur patreon link if u promise to complete the story ill only join ur patreon link if u promise to complete the story ill only join ur patreon link if u promise to complete the story

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justiceH

If you want to read something to kill the remains brain cells you have left this is the book for you 👍🏾

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NightCrown

dropped ? hope not! update pls!!!!!!!!!!!

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Rizki_Caturianto

It's a good and interesting Twilight story!! I think this can be the best Twilight fanfic for sure!!! 😁😁👍👍 I love how you build your story.. You make it step by step (not just put MC/Alan to the Twilight plot from start).. Maybe you should make him train and use his power more (so he can adapt to use his power to protect himself if something happen), then it would be perfect.. I like about Alice pairing too (Alice fans here lol 😍😂🤣) Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the great job author sama 😁👍👍

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Yuukit

i been looking some time twilight story, hope you keep this up and cannot wait more and love of god make mc vampire!!!!

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cassius_black_5382

I give it 5 stars cause I know that this novel can be one of the best twilight novels here and I don't want you to abandon it so keep the hard working

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spknax265

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luckky25

i love alice so auto high review

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WhyImHereAgain_0

it's promising..too early to judge..I have a high hope for this novel..Will edit the review later when there's more chapter..

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PsyLoRD

the more Twilight ff the better

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Gd_Sys

moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

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namenotimportant

one of the few twilight novel i liked.. sad it stopped updating

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Merkoid

I like the idea of a self insert fanfic, but I feel like I should let the author know that transmigration is a person being reborn as one of the already existing characters.

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Moon_Star_6768

i like your work. i never read something like this before. thank you

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Oleg_Nikitin

Мне понравилось. Нет лишнего словоблудия, хотя хотелось бы больше увидеть развитие его сил. Не забывайте данный фанфик и успехов в творчестве автору желаю.