Unnamed Crown

LV 1

TheFirstFirefly

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So this is where you've been hiding. I read the introduction and the first content of Hay Boy, and it's good. I'm going to assume the little girl is a mystery pack. I got it from your tag #mystery and the sudden change of setting in chapter 1 and chapter 2. I don't know. Good luck. All the best wishes.

This review costs 3 pizzas: Pepperoni pizza, cheese pizza, and mushroom pizza. Absolutely NO vegetables other than mushrooms, and the size MUST be the largest on the menu. And 1 liter of coke for every vote stone thing. So, I read chapters 1, 2, 3. And skimming at the latest chapters, you are right that it's slow-paced. I'm not into it, though. But stories like this become a gem if you persevere with that story of yours. So don't give up. You have decent writing, far better than how you talk in real life. So I understood what I read. I think that's about it all for me. I just looked into the writing and the story. Good luck! And I shall await the pizzas.

That was fun to read. If you have a lot of time and patience, and you enjoy the little things. You can find them here. I think the author is not only telling a story but someone's life.

LV 4

funkiller_562

I really liked this. Actually I love all new tropes. The length of the paragraphs is discouraging but the story isn't. That is if you successfully read to the end of the first chapter but I was inspired by the synopsis and introduction and even though I haven't read much, I believe this story would be open to a large fanbase in the future. Keep it up author

Good luck to you, friend. Best wishes for your future endeavors. Should I create a proper review? I feel like I should like everybody else is doing. So, writing is good. I gave it 5/5 Stability updates, i dont know. 5/5 story development, i know there will be something about the past because the story starts with what we dont know of yet. 5/5 character design, the white haired girl and the blackhaired boy. 5/5 world background, looks like youre enjoying making your own world. 5/5

Story wise, this has a great potential. I'm really curious how will the author make a little girl find and get the crown that has never been found for a millennia.

LV 1

DaasWolfe

I read till Chapter 10 and this is a review for the first 10 chapters. This actually good first the story line is unique although a bit fast paced for my taste second the characters design surfaces through their actions and body language I am pretty impressed by this although this should come at later stage of the novel and you should focus more the MC in the first chapters. But all in all this is really good i enjoyed reading it. And finally this is out of topic and not part of the review this genuinely my advice, you have a great novel i have some guesses why its not doing great and most importantly i think you started slow. Just so you know if you manage to release more than 15 k words in your novel for first month you will enter the top starlet novels on the main page for 5 days, and that's where you get your first batch of readers, people who will like your novel will end up reading it and sharing it with their friends of course stable update is a must later on but for now i am just talking about the first 30 k viewers. Good luck, i would love to see this book succeed.

This story has a long way to go. I hope you will have everything you need to pull it through. Good luck.

Gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood luuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuck! There' that's 140 words.

Good luck, friend of my friend's friend's friend's friend.