Dosithee

Chance that his lawyer background ever coming up again? 0.5%

Wait! If those shop owners are chasing him, who's minding the store?! Looting time!

I know mcs comprehension is great, I just haven’t “felt it” in the story. It’s only said after he does things. If you gave a metric before he started doing things like absorbing elements or in this scene explaining the previous best performance and what different ranks o would mean and then have him beet that performance potentially by a big amount, that would make this more satisfying.

I have to say, originally I was concerned w how women were being treated in this novel, but I’m liking the more complex and kind relationships he does have.

All this focus on the metal and lightning would feels out of place and the explanations feel empty since there was no difficulty or special things mentioned when he absorbed those things. At the time he got the lightning it seemed like anyone could more or less do what he did.

I kinda feel like this has all been filler up this point… like who cares about this battle?

Personally I find all this over sexuality undesirable. I’m here for fantasy and action not smut. And I care about women, it makes me deal bad reading about them being thought of and treated this way.

Hope he gets Teleported somewhere new after this. The hunter stuff felt a little too confined to be exciting.

Thanks. The dialogue is very robotic imho.

But that was just the excuse to get him out to the plot they wanted. That’s how writing works. If he wanted Mc to stay in cave he could have.