Actually. This one has no problems. I liked it.
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Definitely needs fixing, Mr. Author.
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Fantasy · MikeWright
The chapter is interesting but you must certainly fix a lot of parts in it, Mr. Author. But overall, it is decent.
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Fantasy · MikeWright
You forgot the pronoun, Mr. Author. "His actions maddened me."
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Fantasy · MikeWright
Do clarify, Mr. Author.
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Fantasy · MikeWright
Hello, dear Author. There's a mistake here.
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Fantasy · MikeWright
I'm afraid that this sentence is quite intricate. It's hard to understand.
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Fantasy · MikeWright
Hello, dear Author. There's a mistake here.
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Fantasy · MikeWright
Well, I just want to support a friend. The plot of this story is great and if everyone gives it a try, I am sure you guys will like it. Try it and you will love it!
Do consider fixing some errors ij this chapter.
The Chronicles of Jadestone
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