Fantastic world-building! I like how detailed the story is, especially because there is a perfect balance between description and dialogue, and that helps me immerse myself more in the story ( I admit, this is the most important thing for me). The main character is interesting enough to keep you reading, and his arrogance is almost funny sometimes. I mean, I know I laughed a few times. Overall, this is a great fantasy story! Good job!
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I appreciate your honesty! Thank you!
No, no. It's ok. The first paragraph is supposed to be a dream sequence, I wanted to use the present tense to emphasize Shiray's involvement in the reality of the dream. I also use in some other chapters the exchange between the present and past tenses, precisely to accentuate certain thoughts of Shiray. They are in a way monologues that fix her in an observer position. She is no longer the main character, she becomes some kind of narrator. I apologize if it can be confusing.
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It was my pleasure!
I believe in you!
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