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T'was a nice read and I will wait for more to come. The only little tidbit I would have had is the grammar,but I can still enjoy it so it's not that bad

I like this fanfic very much. It is sad that this is in a Hiatus now,but in the end it is your ff so I will live with it. Also when you continue writing it,you should probably expend the different skills from the system,else the protag would reach the max in about 20 chapters. Skills like Driving,Infiltration or Parkour could also help as a bodyguard for that later. Or you could add some mundane skills like programming or cooking.

So far it is a good approach, we just have to see whether up to a certain point write his own story or not. The structure of the leveling system is also important. Please, don't make it too powerful,it would take away all the tension.

Overall I like the characters that are in the multiverse chatroom. Also the advantages they get aren't too over the top. Furthermore the character development is solid and realistsic. All in all it is a great story.

The idea of yours is very well implemented and I am already very excited to read your next chapters. Just a heads up, try to explain her current power level and hold yourself inside the canon haki development. (andvanced forms: Kenbunshoko haki: -future sight Busoshoku haki: -emission -internal destruction Haoshoku haki: -infusion -observation destruction

this isn't a romance fanfic,you shoud probably use the "villain" tag for this. Protag only gets girls through rape or blackmail. Furthermore he is a complete psychopath and sadist.

The protag is already a god in the eminence of shadow world😂 I in general like ff written like this, also the writing quality is quite good, But you should stop your protag's teachings to his sister, because you would then later get the question"why do the shadows and claire use the same techiques?"

The story itself is very interesting and comedic. The only small problem that I almost always find is that there are too few chapters in an interesting piece of work

Unique story and so far it is interesting. If possible you shouldn't make this a romance in any way. Because a therapist and their patient shouldn't be in a relationship together.

Overall it is a well written fanfic, that is more heavily base on the romance part of the manga. But that should change soon, the moment the principality comes. Even Luxion couldn`t really win against their secret weapon. The only really sad thing ist that the author isn't updating that often,but he is also not getting paid to write it so...

Whether you will like this story,strongly depends on you opendmindedness to completely ignore the canon, but if you can do that, then it is a satisfying read.

Writing quality is good as always. Though you should add a "dark" tag to the ff. The reason being is the rape in the 4 chapter and I know that there will be many weebs that are accostumed to much harder stuff and won't aknowledge it as a rape. But the woman didn't want to sleep with the protag and just did it because of his extortions.