Just A Dreamer
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Sci-fi · Ozymandias007i
Okay so this is very good. Somewhat cliche here and there but the fresh story and setting really bring this to live. Taking the familiar and making it seem fresh is quite an achievement The author writes very well. It's simple , direct but very effective. Really helps paints images in my mind effectively. Please keep on writing cause you're really gifted.
Fantasy · H0racio
I think your command of English is very good. Even though there are some grammatical and errors here and there I still get the sense of what you're trying to say which is good. Keep on working and reading English novels from native speakers and your English will be on par with them if not better. Your world and story is interesting. It's well paced which is good and it's been engaging this far. Keep on working. There's definitely some potential in this story.
Urban · Williane_M_P
This is a story that's absolutely filled to the brim with some exceptional descriptions and writing. The pacing is perfect and helps create suspense. This is a genuine page turner.
Urban · Dara Manuel
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The story initially doesn't balance it's ideas well in the beginning and it did hurt the pacing but it eventually found its groove and I pretty much enjoyed it. Hopefully the story remains consistent but I like what I see so far.
Sci-fi · Maryam_Zahoor
I absolutely love the use of metaphors. It makes it seem like I'm reading a very long poem. There are occasional grammar errors and awkward sentence structure but overall it's a solid story.
Fantasy · Dream_land
This is brilliant. The synopsis gave me just information to spark my curiosity but the book is so much more. The plot really is the strongest aspect of the story so far. Well - paced with cliffhangers that left me wanting more.
Urban · ClaisiceLouice
Solid first chapter. Eager to see how it progresses
ch 0 1 Encounter
Other than the grammatical errors and use of emojies this is a great story with a lot of potential. You've found a balance with a lot of themes that other authors don't handle as well. Keep on working on it.
Fantasy · A_lucid_Dreamer
The biggest issue is your sentence structure and lack of punctuation here and there but other than that this is really a good story that wastes no time getting into the meat of things.
Fantasy · restful_sins
I'll definitely be more wary of my paragraphs in the future. Thanks.
The most notable thing about the story this far is just how complex the protagonist is. He's cold exterior belie his true nature. Not a fan of such stories but the fact that I read and want more is a testament to the skill of the author. This is definitely one worth reading
Fantasy · dyphaegrayi
Dialogue and descriptions are fantastic here. It's absolutely gripping and absorbing. I love the plot so far. The characters feel real and tangible.
Urban · Kay Lillyt
Poetic, beautiful and moving. This book has everything going for it and more. I love it and I'm sure any fan of fantasy will as well. The vocabulary is vast and the writing quality is consistent.
Eastern · Kalki_gsk
The dialogue is brilliant here. It's a fresh concept and the world seems rich and has potential. The writing is of the highest quality here as well.
Fantasy · SabergKeys
It's perfectly paced. Although it's an over saturated genre the writing quality and world building set it apart from the competition. Definitely worth keeping an eye on.
Fantasy · black_spade69
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The descriptions and world building are truly second to none here . The characters are alive and dynamic. Instantly my favourite book on this site.
Fantasy · TheMortalGod
The world seems rich and alive. I like how it's paced rather slowly. It helps with setting the atmosphere and tone. It could be a bit shorter to make it a tad bit more digestible but it's solid. I'm keen to see how it develops.
Sci-fi · TheCreator_
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Sci-fi · Ozymandias007i