A newbie writer, i sometimes get this strange urge to write... I think it's the dao of writing. Discord Link. https://discord.gg/2Tx6R59pQk
2023-02-14 Joined Global
chose 1st person or 3rd person, you cannot right in both, that's not how a true story teller writes, only when the inner monologue is been brought to fruition via the narrator, can you write something in 1st person, when writing in 3rd person to begin with to my knowledge.
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I would do nothing, and also everything that doesn't go against my moral code, so in a sense i would simply enjoy life at a human level, without the pain of loss and inconvenience, as at that point such things become meaningless.
ch 40 Omni Queen System
Urban · Lordflash
principality/dukedom/kingdom/empire. this is my understanding of hierarchy, but it doesn't matter, Patrick Alexander king sounds better than Patrick Alexander emperor, therefore calling himself king sounds better, not to mention if the fellow is beyond understanding, why can't he be a king instead of an emperor.
As the Master of Beyond and Owner of All, I create you, Athena King, as the first Omni Queen and Goddess of Infinity."
Urban · Lordflash
*humility*
Patrick rested his right hand as a pillow behind him, with his left hand rubbing and squeezing Athena's godly ass. They chuckled and laughed as they witnessed a cub going in circles, trying to bite its tail.
Urban · Lordflash
beautiful portrayal of humanity
Patrick rested his right hand as a pillow behind him, with his left hand rubbing and squeezing Athena's godly ass. They chuckled and laughed as they witnessed a cub going in circles, trying to bite its tail.
Urban · Lordflash
...i was left with a smile and a continuous slow left and right head shake after reading that. indeed, I could imagine that's how a goddess should lose her virginity.that chapter felt quite realistic compared to other r-?? chapters i have read,not to mention i believe this out does your previous version of Athena and Patrick's first time.Needless to say, you're writing style is coming along nicely like mentioned before when compared to the unedited chapters.
"Now that's how a God loses their virginity."
Urban · Lordflash
what happened to chapter 23?
ch 24 Chapter 24 – Merry's Decision
Fantasy · Author_of_Culture
this chapter was confusing and funny at the same time lol
ch 44 Closure...and running for life...
Fantasy · Eternal_Jiminii
writing in more detail makes the story more engaging, its like you are trying to finish the story in one chapter.
ch 18 Breaking mortal shackles(1)
Fantasy · Eternal_Jiminii
That was a good chapter, it left me with a head nod and a smiling face while looking forward to more at the end, opposed to as before when i was just nonchalant about reading this story.
ch 17 Chapter 16: New Homes & Manager Elena
Fantasy · AnimeKeed
This is good and satisfactory, despite how their mortals life were lead in the end, they got together like soulmates in a sense, despite the manipulation of her friend, not to mention, if they never got together, and the mc's mortal wife was faithful, it would have left a hardened taste in my mouth, with the only think i could think as an excuse to be, well, she just lost because of her weak mindset, but this version is better, only because of my mature mind nowadays, i know before it would of been hard to accept the fact this new godly wife, had a man before mc, despite her love for him at that time, but nowadays, i can see past that and understand its the mc's fault, just as much as her, and the mc's mortal wife, now that i aren't as narrow minded. Good job, it was really well done in my eyes.
"Eliza my love, I have lived my entire mortal life dreaming of the day you might be mine. And now that you are hear I would have you as my wife and companion for all of eternity."
Sci-fi · Billy_Bunn_5040
also, the wife part was quite disappointing, as I was looking forwards to a god and goddess type development, it seemed to be very interesting to me. i don't mind harem, but a single female lead feels more suited, maybe another person from his world, or maybe someone relatable to the main character, these are just my thoughts written down, not suggestions, i look forward to it.
ch 0 8 Necessary Conflict
Sci-fi · Billy_Bunn_5040
lol, the amount of times I have read this line from those typical Chinese novels, where the author is infatuated with the mc.
"OMG, he is so handsome, look at his silver hair, is he even human?"
Urban · Lordflash
what a butler, after reading this, I could only snap my fingers, smile, and shake my head while thinking of all them other young masters, only if they had such a fellow as him, but without even reading further, i predict this young man who can remain calm when the world crumbles around him, will be provoked by Patricks ability to remain calm as the realit- no existence itself crumbles
The butler maintained a calm expression as he replied, "I suggest we don't count our chickens before they hatch, Sir Damon. Your interest in Athena Watson might not be reciprocated. And if you start rewarding now before getting your expected result, then not only will we be losing face, but we will also be rewarding it."
Urban · Lordflash
kept
ch 18 The Beginning
Fantasy · Synphomia
i wanted to laugh and say he called him a little man, but then I remembered, everything in existences is little to this fellow...
"So this is the spoiled moron Julius wanted you to greet. I'm a person with no expectations, but you are one damn disappoint, little man!"
Urban · Lordflash
thinking about it, a being that is a true omnipotent existence, should not feel the concept of bored. They should be able to derive just as much joy out of popping bubbles in the bath as children do, they should also have the ability to be as indifferent and unfeeling as a rock, depending on how they want to live in that moment, as they have transcended the very concept of emotion. simply put, if he wants to enjoying mortal things is not a problem right...
"As omnipotent and True Omnipotent beings, wouldn't watching some mortals going around in circles in some toys be tedious?" Athena asked as she drifted closer to Patrick.
GOD OF ALL SYSTEMS
Urban · Lordflash