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The beginning of this book draws the reader in with its intriguing premise of a genetically modified mouse named Zed that has the potential to live indefinitely. The writing does an excellent job of describing the environment and characters, painting a vivid picture of the laboratory and its inhabitants. The interactions between the characters are engaging, and the dialogue is written in a way that feels natural and believable. The introduction of various scientific concepts, such as epigenetic modifications and nanobots, adds depth to the story and helps to create a believable world. The attention to detail in the experimental procedures is also commendable, as it adds to the realism of the story and increases the reader's immersion. The pacing of the story is well done, with the introduction of the conflict in the form of an attack on the laboratory adding tension and excitement to the narrative. This event creates a sense of urgency and raises questions about the motives behind the attack, keeping the reader engaged and eager to find out what happens next. Overall, the start of this book is captivating, with a unique premise, well-developed characters, and an intriguing conflict. With the combination of scientific concepts and action, it appeals to readers who enjoy science fiction and thriller genres. In conclusion, this book shows great potential and is off to a promising start. With some polishing and further development, it could become a captivating read for fans of science fiction and action thrillers.

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Same my fellow edge skeleton

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The opening chapters of this book set the stage for a captivating story, as readers are introduced to a dramatic scene at a ball where the protagonist, Emma Woods, is being accused of stealing a painting and passing it off as her own. The tension is palpable, and the author does an excellent job of immersing readers in the unfolding drama. In these initial chapters, the author effectively creates a sense of intrigue that compels the reader to continue and discover how Emma will navigate the challenges and accusations she faces. The characters are introduced with sufficient detail to understand their roles in the story, and the dialogue effectively conveys their emotions and reactions to the events taking place. The pacing in these chapters is fast, which works well to engage the reader and maintain their interest. However, as the story continues, the author may consider slowing down the pace at times to allow readers to better digest the events and emotions experienced by the characters. This could create a more satisfying narrative arc and deepen the readers' connection to the story. The author's descriptive language helps to paint a vivid picture of the ball's atmosphere, providing readers with a strong sense of the setting. As the story continues, it would be beneficial to maintain this level of description to ensure readers remain fully immersed in the world of the story. Based on these first few chapters, the book appears to be a promising and engaging tale. Readers are likely to be eager to continue on and discover how Emma navigates the challenges she faces and how the story unfolds. With a strong foundation laid in the opening chapters, the author has the potential to create a truly captivating and memorable story.

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The Nascent Bloodline is a story set in a world where humans with extraordinary abilities, called the Nascent Bloodline, coexist with the Paranormal humans. The story begins by setting up the history of the world, explaining the origin of the Nascent Bloodline, and their eventual decline. The narrative then moves forward 100,000 years later to focus on a young boy named Egon. The first chapter does an excellent job of establishing the world and its history. The concept of humans with incredible powers living among others is a well-explored theme in the fantasy genre, but the author manages to put a unique spin on it by focusing on the Nascent Bloodline as a dwindling race. The story of Tragon, the last Nascent Bloodline survivor, and his heroic deeds is gripping and adds depth to the world. In the second chapter, the story shifts to a new era called the "Infinity Era," where technology has progressed significantly, and humans have gained knowledge from an unknown species. The introduction of Egon and his mother adds a layer of mystery and intrigue to the story, and the sudden attack by mysterious creatures raises the stakes for the characters. The author's writing style is engaging, and the pacing of the story is well-balanced between world-building and action. However, there are a few areas where the narrative could be improved. For example: Show, don't tell: The story relies heavily on telling rather than showing. To improve the narrative, focus on showing the characters' actions, emotions, and surroundings through descriptive language and immersive details, rather than simply stating facts and events. This will create a more engaging and vivid reading experience. Pacing: The pacing of the story could be improved. The transition between scenes and the introduction of new characters feel rushed. Consider slowing down the pacing and providing more context to each scene, so the reader can better understand and engage with the story. Overall, The Nascent Bloodline is a promising start to a fascinating fantasy story.

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Always fun to have a determined character!

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Good for her still staying down to earth

"Nurse Turner, do you have a moment?" Doctor Wilson calls me in. I like Dr. Wilson. She is a good caring doctor. She comes from a rich family. Her husband is a famous rock star. Still she managed to stay very kind and down to earth. In her office she tells me Alex Moore will be admitted for a couple of weeks. "He broke his hip so he will stay with us for 4 to 6 weeks. It's weird you would think someone who does his own stunts wouldn't fall like that" True that was weird, and I got why he needed to stay hospitalized longer. "He told me it wasn't luck that he survived. I didn't want to get too personal so I didn't ask. It seems like a calculated move though" I tell her honestly. This seems to show he is careless with he health. Or just a big risk taker like a lot of bored rich people are. But it is good to know when you are healing from a broken hip. We need to keep in mind that he might risk his healing process by being reckless.

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He sounds very handsome!

I miss working in the ER. I miss working with real people with real problems and real fears. The promotion was something I couldn't really turn down or so I was told. Not to mention the fact that it had more regular hours, and better pay. Making life so much easier for all of us. So I took the job, and I pretend to be nice enough to my patients. "I don't know who truly is happy I am back." Does he actually expect me to pity him? He is crazy if he thinks I will give him a pep talk. "I am sure the masses of adoring fans that made it impossible for me to get to my job are thrilled to have you back." He looks at me like he is trying to read me as I write down his stats on his clipboard. "I take it you're not one of my adoring fans?" he asks with a sly smirk. Ready to hear me gush over his movies, over how attractive he is? He is attractive, dark blond hair in a messy blow out, gray eyes. And a sharp jaw with a slight stubble. Paired with the arrogant smirk of a man who knows just how stunning he is. That arrogant smirk is the reason it gives me great pleasure to tell him "No, I'm not a fan, I've never seen any of your movies. I am too busy, you know, actually making a difference."

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