Webnovel Author: EvilBlueCrystal - Fanfic Collection

The plot creative enough, it is the same as the manga, Mc acquires everything he desires easily. He is reincarnated into the world he wants to when he says so, becomes the same person as the original with no past of his own, follows the same training, gets the same system and abilities, takes the same path, and goes to the same dungeons. He has easy time leveling, in one chapter he reaches level 30 with little effort. He acts like a chuuni laughing when he kills a monster. He has no original abilities, but has overused skills like Gluttony that won't have any use and play any role.

The Mc is like a teenager pretending to be a young man but talks and acts more mature. He says he wants to stay low but gets himself in a life death battle with children acting like the righteous hero to stop bullying. He never thinks or says anything relevant, it's always about others and reacting to seeing them. He doesn't know the world he's in, he spent several years Not training or exercising at all, he claims that eating a lot of food without training makes you strong. He's a rare Sensor but still complains, his talent is wasted of his incompetence and inability to progress, so he wants to be Senju but doesn't do anything because he's afraid of Danzo, he doesn't practice Chakra control, when there isn't any way to discern talent and Chakra quality without testing, everyone is born with Chakra without awakening it, and being talented is different than how much Chakra you have. Also Naruto and Sasuke are women.

This plot is portrayed as something grim and dark survival, but the tone and writing is casual at best, more like slice-of-life in a modern world with ordinary humans than anything related to a complex shinobi world. The mc lacks sense of crisis, desperation, and caution, he's a weak scarred boy who seems more interested in making friends rather than to be an antagonist.

Outdated review. Mc is an ordinary novel reader reborn into a world where a person's ability is based on experience and understanding, paired with a shallow personality, beliefs and lack of background from his previous life make him an uninteresting character to follow. Mc no previous experience and time to train. As it stands now, the story falls flat it's following the original with an unremarkable protagonist. The first chapters are a complete waste since they don't introduce anything new or refreshing. Mc has future knowledge, but is unable to remember crucial details, seems forced, unrealistic, and frustrating that continually emphasizes his forgotten memories. Mc reveals his foreknowledge to his grandpa, when he should expect no reasonable outcome from it. His grandpa knowing about the concept of extreme physique is hard to believe, something that is known by clan leaders or those who have ancient knowledge. If someone wanted to create an overpowered main character, why not just make Bai Ning Ning the protagonist right from the beginning? At least she would have a more intriguing perspective, background, and two personalities one from previous world and one is future self. She would be forced to follow the original mc while making use of him, and after that she would do things her own way. The protagonist's presence undermines the plot's concept of survival, because so much of the original mc success is due to his carefully balanced strength, resources, luck, and timing. With this protagonist thrown into the mix, it disrupts the story's established flow, one change would mess up everything, and there's doesn't seem a place for the mc in the future plot, since the original protagonist dies at the start, and it becomes impossible to follow the original timeline. The current protagonist kinda lacks the capability to carry the narrative forward. If the mc isn't smart he should be following original mc like the northern dark ice girl did, while building alliances, planning for future events, and gathering resources.

Simplistic story, + first person, + excessive describing everything, + hard to read and take seriously. Mc is ordinary student that has the body of gojo and acts very smug. He keeps thinking random stuff all the time like any of it matters, bad friendship no build up, and young masters I mean thugs show up out of nowhere to attack him so that Mc can reveal his powers. Mc says he can't and won't beat criminals cause they have plot armor, so then what is he doing? Lots of details of how his room looks and about infinity but no development, no meaning and reason why is Mc doing anything or what he's aiming for in the future.

Gets fruit from God, first thing he does is explain and reveal it to everyone. His fruit ability is very op that can extract others fruits, why would he think noone would backstab him. Reincarnates but already has rivals and teammates the first day. Paragraphs too big, there's monologue multiplied by ten. Dialogue is very casual, they talk like children playing Minecraft pretending to be a polite and honest individuals. Mc explain his plans openly all the time, and gives friendly tips. Battles are too early, he's gathering fruits like it's nothing. His crew is only there to help him get more fruits.

Right at the start too many systems, abilities, rewards, points, ranks, and shops. No introduction or explaining anything, just straight up exercise, and npc thought process. First person very boring. Everything is power of friendship, effort, references to random anime and manga. Anything mc does or says is love, kindness, friendship, family, or harem related. Mc wants to learn martial arts but can copy anything instantly, and has universal level spiral abilities. Gets several techniques every chapter. System function sucks. Wish fulfillment plot, lame interactions of useless characters, street fights, nothing enjoyable or interesting.

Mc acts like he reincarnates every week and knows everything about every universe. Ten year time skip of him accomplishing nothing. Posses another person's body and says he loves 'his' sister. Gets random system that let's him travel to other universes to deliver packages, while he's immune to literally an attack. His entire existence is being submissive that goes to other words to save women for worthless virtual currency. The characters are worthless, gendrbend Denji sob story. Procceds to go on a date with someone with smells worse than a dumbster. Doesn't have any freedom of his own, needs to get permission from his sister. The last 2 chapters make no sense, characters from different universes are in chainsaw man so you idea who they are. Plot entirety consists of his thoughts and info dumps, no direction random events slapped together.

MC's pacifism attitude leads to illogical decisions, him giving up profits and control of his company way too early without any plan. The dialogue has bad drama and arguments, and interactions are shallow. The pacing is too fast, events are like objectives, that are mentioned briefly and skipped, the plot devolves into poorly written explicit material.

Not very amazed by the plot; "Oops, I Accidentally Saved the World: A Reluctant Hero Reincarnated as the Dark Lord Who Doesn't Want to Hurt Anyone, Obliterated an Evil Overpowered Ring, and Spent Way Too Much Time Explaining His Plans to his Baffled Enemies, All While Maintaining a Ordinary Tone and Trying to Befriend the Millions He 'Pranked' to Their Doom, Plus Sorry It's Just a Prank Bro, But Wait... He Dies in the End and Reincarnates as an Elf with a Whole Set of Out of Place Jokes."

The opening phrase is generic, failing to provide any insight into the theme, plot, or protagonist. Unfortunately, the rest of the chapter is the same, so it's skipped entirely as it seems irrelevant. The protagonist, who lacks any discernible personality, exhibits a disappointingly casual and ordinary attitude throughout the narrative. Then it's followed by abrupt time skips in the early stages of the story, leaving the reader disoriented and disconnected from the plot. The storytelling style is not engaging, that leans heavily on telling you the events but never shows you anything. Furthermore, the protagonist's ability to acquire private information with mere inquiries seems implausible and unrealistic. It's baffling why we should care about a character who possesses no battle power, strength, abilities, or unique qualities. The dialogues between the protagonist and his so-called "friend" lacks depth, it's not at all interesting. The protagonist's family adds nothing of value to the plot, making their existence feel entirely unnecessary. The story should have started at chapter 3 when the protagonist uses the teleporter explaining his reincarnation, sparing readers from the tedious and uneventful beginning. By this point, all interest was lost. The importance of finding information and journeying to another shelter at the other side of the continent, arriving at the right time period without much explanation seemed contrived and unrealistic. The dealing with the merchant don't make sense. System messages are not in brackets. The lack of logical thinking and planning by the protagonist, combined with his inexplicable confidence, made him an unconvincing character. The absence of detailed environmental descriptions and scene transitions further hindered any immersion. In summary, this novel is a casual read, while the writing itself is decent, the story's flat and unimpactful.

You'd expect an epic plot, akin to "One Shall Fall, One Shall Stand" but all you get is a Clash of Clans building journey. There's no grasp of the concept of dialogue constantly resorting to wrong formatting and misuse of first person viewpoint instead of third person for his initial state. For the characters there's not enough background about them and as for the plot the protagonist backstory was that he attempted to a traverse different universe and failed, but it would have made more sense if they'd crashed on an unknown planet after the Unicorn battle, explored the planet, scavenged parts, and healed his injuries while upgrading, they even have a "system" that could have allowed for skill and information creation, tech creation and building skills. But no, the environment is left undescribed, and they dive headfirst into picking up parts with no context or details. The pacing is all over the place, missing crucial in-between moments, a disconnected series of events [Who, How, What, When, Where, Why]. The state of the planet, the protagonist's abilities, the scrap bots, the tech, and how it works – none of this is said. The sentences are either fragmented or excessively lengthy, feel out of place or not related to each other, making it hard to follow the narrative, a chaotic mess of, [In my spare time, i spent on my new decepticon army it's only a prototype at the moment it is going to replace the vehicon troopers as the main battle force of the new decepticon army if it goes to plan.] Interactions and dialogues are devoid of meaning, characters simply exchange empty words like, "Where are you?", "Send me your location", "Come to my location". The protagonist reveals unreasonable information without thinking, and everyone blindly follows him. Character descriptions are casually thrown in without any real detail "It looks like... ", "Imagine that...", no way anyone knows how they look without saying anything about their parts, body, accessories, weapons, shape. As for subsequent chapters, they're just as aimless as the first but become worse thanks to the misuse ofAI. The story lacks purpose and progression, gathering items lacks context and buildup, rendering it uninteresting. Pacing shifts abruptly from fast to a crawl with one chapter that consists of nothing but the protagonist talking to themselves and the next is slightly better but fails to give any importance to the good guys point of view and their sudden raid, and they also speak in the first person.

Started off good, but quickly become a tedious and lackluster story. The initial interest surrounding the characters dissappeared as they lost any semblance of meaning and personality, making it hard to even recognize them among the multitude of randomly appearing individuals. The protagonist, who was previously rank 8, literally does nothing of interest after being reincarnated. The lack of new Gu worms in a supposedly big city, coupled with the protagonist's many inheritances that only end up being sold into auction, but only few Gu worms are shown, that either fade into obscurity or have no impact on the plot whatsoever. Despite having good opportunities to advance, he continually chooses the most mundane and illogical ways, devoid of any planning or strategy. For countless chapters, he struggles to make any progress in adjusting his Dao marks or awakening his aperture, and not refining anything, resorting to a risky and seemingly pointless methods. However, conveniently, when the plot demands it, he suddenly becomes capable of doing the impossible. The absence of descriptions of the locations, environment, and people, as a result the world-building suffers. Each passing chapter is more boring, further into aimlessness, devoid of any structure. The protagonist's limited schemes, his strategies lack depth and planning, from basic backstabbing or risky and unsatisfying decisions that result in his death. The initially slow pacing, becomes inconsistent, dragging the narrative into a tiresome monotonous cultivation and drawn-out explanations about the Gu system, where he sits as a tree all day helping some traitor who killed his brother.

The interactions, dialogue, and pace are perfect. Maybe include descriptions about the surroundings when there's a change from one place to another to make it natural. The plot can focus on events the original skipped and different outcomes or missed opportunities where the character takes a different approach for gaining resources. Avoid introducing and abruptly changing locations without purpose, they should serve a purpose, such as setting the tone, advancing the plot, or revealing important information. Don't skip the growth and progression, like cultivation, training, sects, and learning, include new abilities. It's better to include the summary of current skills and resources at the end of a chapter. Include memorable character quotes. You can also change the pov to other relevant character of the current plot. If the protagonist forms a team or recruits important members, dedicate chapters to explore their backgrounds, plans, thoughts, and significance to the protagonist's organization, don't immediately abandon them. Plot idea template for creating smart characters: Character A thinks he is the strongest and plans for the treasure but his pawns escaped his control, Character B ignores the original plan and plans to take everything for himself and others who he created an alliance, Character C is actually a spy that ruins their plans without knowing of their rebellion, Character D has a scheme in place and takes advantage of their fight to reap the benefits but is stopped by Character E during his escape.

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The protagonist has basic backstory reincarnated with no abilities, his personality is nonexistent, his thoughts and feelings not genuine, and his actions are weak without intelligence or planning that spends several months doing nothing. The useless characters that don't matter die after a chapter of being introduced. The plot is a bad copy lacking normal structure, has unnatural progression and irrelevant details, no meaning or logic, and everything interesting is skipped. He is given boring op technique by a soul that would normally posses him, and still wants to take original protagonist's book.

The plot makes absolutely no sense, the protagonist doesn't have a backstory, there's no characters, no logic. Some unreadable events put together without a reason.

The protagonist is a villain with a consistent personality and strategical planning but lacks a good backstory and doesn't have clear beliefs, motivations, and longterm goal. The writing is average but the fights are good with minor grammar mistakes. The explainations about the protagonist's are abilities are logical, but about his transformations there isnt anything highly exciting so far, him getting some weak beasts dna is not that interesting. The writing and descriptions are fine but the world is somewhat bland. The plot is decent, it mainly focus on him try to evolve his abilities but apart from that there arent any notable events or development. The sidecharacters are well presented but there is anyone likeable or interesting on the protagonist's side.

The start is decent, but the protagonist has no abilities, his system and strength is never shown or used, his only goal is to develop his village by creating books and gathering talents like pets, that are all flat and useless and serve no purpose. The plot is dumb without a meaningful development, the protagonist is not even part of the plot, a lot of events and details are skipped, there's no training or learning, and anyone could find out about his village secrets since he doesn't bother hiding anything.