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selkia
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With this, the beam of dark aura from the saber ultimately fizzled out, and both Sakura and the saber were swallowed by the dense liquid. The waves melted their skin and bones, vaporizing them without even a chance to scream as they drowned in it. Although saber's pain didn't last long and vanished quickly after... Sakura wasn't that lucky. Her body kept on regenerating itself, suffering until the liquid started to melt her vital organs too finally putting an end to her misery.
Fate/Nocturne
Anime & Comics · selkia
With this, the beam of dark aura from the saber ultimately fizzled out, and both Sakura and the saber were swallowed by the dense liquid. The waves melted their skin and bones, vaporizing them without even a chance to scream as they drowned in it. Although saber's pain didn't last long and vanished quickly after... Sakura wasn't that lucky. Her body kept on regenerating itself, suffering until the liquid started to melt her vital organs too finally putting an end to her misery.
Fate/Nocturne
Anime & Comics · selkia
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ch 0 5 *Notice Please Read*
Reincarnated into Albion Online
Video Games · Noble_Savage
Then his head got chopped off by the very same object that impaled Bazett, seemingly an extension of that person's attire, who the boy recognized as Sakura. This person, Sakura. Was overflowing with mana, even Bazett could feel it. Just staring at her sent shivers down her spine... She tries to force her eyes to stay open as Sakura slowly walks closer to her.
Fate/Nocturne
Anime & Comics · selkia
Then his head got chopped off by the very same object that impaled Bazett, seemingly an extension of that person's attire, who the boy recognized as Sakura. This person, Sakura. Was overflowing with mana, even Bazett could feel it. Just staring at her sent shivers down her spine... She tries to force her eyes to stay open as Sakura slowly walks closer to her.
Fate/Nocturne
Anime & Comics · selkia
Yeah, didnt really put much thought into it while writing
"Today, right here, right now... I am calling to any spirit who is willing to help me on my journey. The town which I am in, is in danger... Innocent people's lives are at stake, that is if there are any left... And I am not going to allow that... I am not going to let anyone make anyone suffer just for their own cause. And I need someone powerful enough to do that..."
Fate/Nocturne
Anime & Comics · selkia
I see, I mainly use "..." to indicate that there is like an long pause between the sentences. But yes it doesn't add anything to the dialogue as you've said and I probably overuse them 'a bit' too much lol. Thanks for your advice!
"Sure... I accept it... But I have one condition. After this war if you want to stay- That is if we win the war in the first place... I won't really need you after all this, you know... The only reason I summoned you was because I simply was lacking the power to put up a fight against entities like the ones you and I saw yesterday, and that's it."
Fate/Nocturne
Anime & Comics · selkia
Yes, I see now you're right. I'll work on shortening the dialogues and breaking them up as you suggested in my next chapters. Thanks for the advice!
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Fate/Nocturne
Anime & Comics · selkia
Hm, I see what you mean. The "Master's Perspective" thing. But from what I've read while writing these parts, sometimes in exceptional cases, a Servant's abilities can hide their skills and parameters even from their masters. However I don't think that this was from the wiki, so I can't say its %100 true or not. Nevertheless thank you so much for your comment and critique! It really helps me to improve and keep going. [img=recommend]
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Fate/Nocturne
Anime & Comics · selkia
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"Calm down red head. Why so serious? Besides what difference would it make to you to know my 'real name' as how you say it..."
Fate/Nocturne
Anime & Comics · selkia
I definitely agree. I give this to you sir; 📣
"I would say 'Sorry for making you worry' but it doesn't seem like you are anyways, are you?.." His tone sounds smug even though his mask covers his entire face, you can almost tell that he is smirking behind that mask; "Class, Alter Ego. A pleasure to meet you, master. Oh but excuse me I was first supposed to ask the classic 'Are you my Master?' thing before laying on the assumption that you are my master eh?"
Fate/Nocturne
Anime & Comics · selkia