CoffeeFreak

1mth

Commented

Honestly it's good that you got rid of it, but instead of Grindelwald, you could've made some fate-like encounter with a god or sth, maybe death not liking the weapon itself. Grindelwald, while stronger for sure, still shouldn't have come close to stopping this. I think you're massively raising power levels for both dumbs and grinder if you leave it like this?

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Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

Book&Literature · athass_prkr

CoffeeFreak

1mth

Commented

These are the facts from previous paragraphs: -He has a twin brother. -He can't remember his brother's face. -He has an older brother and a little brother. -He has a good memory and can remember something like 1 yr 2 mnth 1 wk 3 days. (Quite a few contradictions in paragraphs above author bro, maybe take a look, but dw I'll keep going) And of course fire nation attacks. <3

"What can I say? A cornered rat, as they say," I left the sentence unfinished, knowing they would understand as they had heard me say it before. "In short, that's it. Now, back to the point... When my older brother and I were fourteen, some kid caught us practicing. He was quite young, only about ten or eleven. It's funny that everything that happened next started with him. He was the son of a trader who had stopped in our village for some rest. My brother and mom didn't pay much attention to it, and neither did I, but I have a good memory, as I've mentioned before. The trader left the village the next day, and three days later, soldiers from the Fire Nation arrived in the village. They were looking for water and earthbenders. Our parents and all the villagers refused to cooperate, but the soldiers didn't wait. Moreover, they had a firebender with them..."

Avatar The Last Airbender: Not Avatar

Anime & Comics · Vandalizer

CoffeeFreak

3mth

Commented

btw, you can try using chatgpt for this maybe? E.g. write what you want him to say, and ask gpt to make some kind of rhyme with it.Modern solutions 😁

[A/N: I always assumed that Danzo would be the toughest character to write. I never thought it'd be Killer Bee. His dialogues are tough to write!]

Naruto : The Wind Calamity

Fantasy · Devil_Hex

CoffeeFreak

4mth

Commented

I couldn't figure out whether you were translating or creating your own story with the pace you are going at, but whatever it is - I love your consistency and quality!I don't have any suggestion really, love everything so far, just wanted to let you know 👋👌

While we are still approaching the end of this story, write to me in the comments. What elements would you like to be present in the new story? Which aspects of this story do you think should be improved for the next one, and which should be minimized?

BTTH Life Simulator System

Anime & Comics · Kisshot

CoffeeFreak

6mth

Commented

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"I know he can use the spell that is created by Jon Dare! I still don't get the connection between these two."

Dragonborn Saga

Video Games · El_Don

CoffeeFreak

6mth

Commented

He shared his intrusive thoughts

I need to put those two bad girls in some serious mental trauma as soon as possible, else, I will be the one suffering for their actions from now onward.

Dragonborn Saga

Video Games · El_Don

CoffeeFreak

7mth

Commented

I lost too many braincells already:3 adios

Selling a top-tier model of the latest Holographic Chamber would earn her a commission of over 30,000 dollars!

Sacrifice's Rise: I Became Invincible After Entering Godslayer Temple

Fantasy · White_Ink

CoffeeFreak

7mth

Posted

It's a pretty nice read, much better than it's current rating. I usually give a try to any novel with decent grammar(this one qualifies). As with any fan-fic, you always have to close one eye on some details - author's touch, but up to this point(ch ~90) it's rather enjoyable for me. Keep up the good work author!

[HP X DXD] Master of a Universe

Book&Literature · Ashmodai

CoffeeFreak

7mth

Commented

Malfoy shook his head before shouting, "This doesn't matter! More importantly, enemies of the Heir, beware! You'll be next, Mudbloods!" once again guiding general attention onto the petrified cat and the five people already present in the corridor.

[HP X DXD] Master of a Universe

Book&Literature · Ashmodai

CoffeeFreak

8mth

Commented

Ethan Hunt?

[Brown Bear - Tatiana: Ethan…don't tell me you are the famous special soldier Ethan of Bald Eagle? Now I'm curious about your talent. ]

One Piece World-Only I Know The PLOT!

Anime & Comics · Novelette_Seeker

CoffeeFreak

8mth

Replied to Oglan

Ink is also a physical object, due to that in theory it should be able to be scanned - same way as echolocation works, only on a really really small scaleI'm pretty sure human hands can't feel it unless under some special circumstances I guess

Ginny made it a point to buy all the books she could get her hands on. Sadly she could not get what Egypt specialised in: Jinxes and Curses that affected an area. She was far too young, and there was absolutely no way her parents would allow her to even get close to such magic. So she could only reluctantly give up. At the same time, she resolved to create a spell that allowed her to quickly copy the contents of books. It would make her life so much easier.

Harry Potter: The Witch of the Red

Book&Literature · DaoistDumbledore

CoffeeFreak

8mth

Commented

I'm not sure if you already came up with the sound spell idea(you probably did) - but how about a mini-scale sonar scanning spell which can scan book pages while Ginny is holding the book?

Ginny made it a point to buy all the books she could get her hands on. Sadly she could not get what Egypt specialised in: Jinxes and Curses that affected an area. She was far too young, and there was absolutely no way her parents would allow her to even get close to such magic. So she could only reluctantly give up. At the same time, she resolved to create a spell that allowed her to quickly copy the contents of books. It would make her life so much easier.

Harry Potter: The Witch of the Red

Book&Literature · DaoistDumbledore

CoffeeFreak

8mth

Posted

I've read all the free chapters, and it's a pretty nice translation quality, as well as story development. I'd love to see more, might take a while to amass the necessary tickets though.

Constellation Door

· Webnovel Comics

CoffeeFreak

10mth

Commented

You're writing this story on your own, people can & always will comment, sometimes good and sometimes bad stuff. But like in life, it's your choice what to do of it, imho - just keep at it. You obviously have a knack for it, wouldn't have gotten this far otherwise. P.S. The last chapter was pretty obvious though, I don't think you need to simplify it further, could ruin the charm. Happy brainstorming

Anyway, do as you please. I'm done for the day, had a rough fucking day, and thought the chapter had been clear enough for the egg shells of this site, but I guess I was wrong. I need to improve my writing to deal with that, EVEN MORE. Maybe a 500 word disclaimer before any chapter would do the trick, I don't know, I'm brainstorm this shit later.

Fairy Tail: Shinigami

Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER

CoffeeFreak

10mth

Commented

Pay up 😁

If we reach 1.4K stones I will post another chapter today.

Fairy Tail: Shinigami

Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER

CoffeeFreak

11mth

Commented

Can respect this. Literally can't remember any other chinese mc's name other than Linley, from Coiling Dragon. That's how much it's cherished from my side.

Though he consumed many stories. There was one, in particular, he would always cherish. Danmachi. It was the first story that provided him with a sense of wonder, beyond the generic fairy tales and stories he found in daily life. He instantly fell in love with the story.