Beginning Of Fire

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AppleLover

Hello there. This is a new story I had in mind since some time ago. I hope you like it. Because I know I will. Since English is my third language, it's possible that grammatical errors occur during writing. I'm sorry if it's the case. Thank you and good day.

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heavenlyundead

Gonna be honest i tried to read more but the background is soooo messsed up that if i could i need to go on a killing spree in gta to cool down. also if the author can fix these time paradoxes it would be lovely and i would def restart reading. (also before anyone talk about the time reversal technique both the ANs and miraak's monologue reveals these flaws as facts so these are oversights not intentional.) just a list for people who are wondering on why the background is so wrong: 1. Atmorans are not nords in fact nords came after atmorans mingled with the nede (the human tribes of tamrial). 2. Dragon cult is still in its infancy and is a subgroup of the worship of animal spirits. 3. the 500 happened after the night of tears not before. 4. magic is venerated not hated, Nordic hatred for magic happens in the 3rd era not the 1st era. 5. the interactions with the snow elves seems unnaturally hostile as at current situation despite the night of tears not happened by the time i read. 6. they do know the race of elves exited before as they use to share land in atmora with them, so the talk about race wierded me out as if they never heard of any other race before. 7. Miraak himself is probably hasn't been borned yet because he comes in lore recognition like 100 years from now and on the island of solsteim, and yes he is a nord so meaning he physically cannot have lived during the first landing in the tamrial. i know i am being a buzzkill and the premise sounds awesome but unless the convoluted timeline for me is like reading a history book and suddenly seeing the nazi's and hitler during the middle ages, alexander the great/cursed during the renaissance era and Donald trump as the emperor of china during the 3 dynasties era. why is bethesda stories cursed on this site, first super mutant that can reproduce and now this.

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SHEOGORATH

It is actually pretty nice, i just hope that you won’t drop it. i know getting motivated is hard but don’t worry, as long as you write some nice **** peoples will read it with utmost attention.

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Ragnaz_Kelot

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Daoist_Lake

Oh Yeahhh :v i am found potential story fanfiction in section video game ._. So far, this story just need more chapter and more creativity from author ._. So, Author-sama i need more CHAPTER!!!!!! :v and you doesn't have to hurried to make more chapter, just relax and MAKE MOREEEEEEE AND LONGGG CHAPTERRRRRR ._. :v:v:v:v:v

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Uncle_Sheogorath

Good idea but the way you wrote it is stupid. Firstly Miraak is no hero, he wouldn't care for the plight of elves nor even consider saving them. Most importantly why the heck is the mc 10 years old while interacting with adults like some equal. Now just imagine if some 10-year-old guy boy talks to you like some 30 years old, that would be weird and you would be freaked out and suspicious. Also the whole atmoran culture you presented as barbaric. Atmorans were a powerful magical civilisation with complex architecture and magic. Not some idiot brawlers swinging axes. Lastly, no parent would allow their child to leave for 8 years alone in a new continent. Overall all these points ruin the story for me.

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HerPingus

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