My Arcane System

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SkyrecLeftya

Going to have an attempt on a system-based novel. If there is a clear interest for this novel I will start to pursue daily release of chapters if that is the case. Else enjoy for now! Have a couple of things in mind in store for this one. Therefore I hope you enjoy the story foremost, and the grammar/writing will improve overtime as I will gain more experience as an author. If you like the novel so far/think it might be interesting, please leave a comment or show your support. Any positive feedback drives my writing lust forward.

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Madness_in_despair

The story has grammatical errors all over the place, character is a cookie-cut basic system holder. Description could use some work, you're trying paint a picture with too little paint. The story so far is try gloss over and detail events to the point I'm not sure what's going on. The story has a good update speed but I'd prefer if the author got an editor to go through the chapters and revise them to improve the simpler mistakes. The author has spoken of the story's main problem yes, but the world of the Mc or their perspective of the world could be further shown. My only question is why use 'gritted teeth' or 'gritted their teeth' for when the characters smile or grin? Gritted implies strain against two objects so the characters sound like their in pain or angered to the point of frustration.

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Soul_Reads

Awesome Novel!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Nickolas_Richmond

this is a great book A+ i think it is good for lots over different types of readers that like different genres jsysbsjxbjshxnsjxbjzjzjsjsjsn

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IcySleep

You should most definitely keep this going the idea is flawless the way you did the background is also flawless and I think if you keep going you will skyrocket

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FalgaGS

What is that my Alter?!!?!(づ｡◕‿‿◕｡) 5 star for thatლ(・﹏・ლ)╰(*´︶`*)╯ ehhehbebbenenjemsmsmsmmsmmsmdmr bfbbrhtjjtjtjtj jntnnfnnfnnfnfnnfnnfnnfnfnfnfnnfnf

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Darius_Chromwell

It’s “ok”, from what i can tell it’s a slow burn sort of novel. It’s basically Re Zero with a system same sort of forced Groundhog Day ability. Overall I give it a meh

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Akash_Kumar_avvaru

dear author you didn't finish the book and there is no proper ending . quickly finish the book so me and other reader s won't be in the dark. so please finish the book soon as posible.

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Jurgis_But

pretty good this one, i like how its paced, though the world development is not the best. overall one of the better new novels i've found and peaked my interest.