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Hello, I'm not Goku! ...
And I was transmigrated to the Dragon ball universe, with the biokinetic ability. being able to copy a characteristic of any race or being in the universe.
I see a big world open to many possibilities and especially Women in Dragon Ball .....................
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Note: This is my first fanfiction. English is my second language and I'm still learning it, so don't expect the most impeccable writing from me. I had this idea for a while and I wanted to bring it to life, so I started writing. I appreciate any helpful feedback. Also, again I don't own anything except my own MC and I don't want to offend any party. This is just for entertainment. enjoy~
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Author's notes:
Well I plan to create multiple fanfic in different world with same main character and same powers ie biokinetics. and how he would react to being thrown into a different world.
Right here starting with Dragon Ball. DESTINY/ . DXD. Wonder. A.D. HP. and much more. I'm going to create the covers and the beginning will be more or less the same. but it will be transported to different character for example plan 2. like marvel hela in which the Asgardians have a civilization developed closer to the costumes north of the wall of Westeros in which you need to defeat your wife so that she becomes your wife, as the Reincarnator will get out of this situation OR IN A DIFFERENT SITUATION LIKE Tony Stark at the age of 15 after graduating from MIT, his parents die and he has to assume, luckily he has his childhood friend comes to comfort him and consolidate the promise once made.
And a timeline in which Harry Potter is adopted by Aunt Petunia Unica, who looks closer to Lily only MILF and Wearing Glasses, Like a book writer who lives in a small mansion with her nephew and Unique" MAN IN YOUR LIFE" 24/7 that insane surprises can occur, especially when your aunt has the predisposition to be like "Gasai Yuno" Yander crazy.
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Harem stories in dragon ball are rare, so I'm looking forward to more, if I'm ever displeased I'll change this review as a warning.................
Many of the 2-star voters did not read the story until chapter 20 or 10. The problems have already been solved in general, so enjoy it~~ I started doing translations and corrections using chatgpt, so most if not all of the problems are likely already resolved. Enjoy~~
Flow is very choppy otherwise pretty good could do with an editor to help smooth it out.
Though you have what could be a solid FF there is a few teething issues, mainly the flow of the story is a little off putting. PS. Bio-kinetic is about the manipulation of energy and not biology, either you have misunderstood the abilities or your title is wrong. If you need to know what Bio-kinetic is, search about Gambit from Marvel or Hisoka Morow from Hunter x Hunter. All the best.
I would like to present the female characters in the story to be the harem of the monks, but who will get into it, but you will choose to enter (there will be gender-swapped characters like Goku characters that you choose to change the gender from the original as well, with the gender-switching character will have (female) as well) : Android 21 (good and evil) , Android 17(female) , Android 18 , Angela , Annin , Caulifla , Cheelai , Cocotte , Colonel Violet , Erasa , Fasha , Hasky , Heles , Kale , Kusu , Launch , Mai , Marcarita , Maron , Miss Piiza , Nain , Princess Snake , Ranfan , Mermaid , Tights , Towa , Vados , Videl , Yurin , Zangya , General White's Sisters(If you take this too, you may need to add some chapters.) , Frieza (female) , Cell (female) , broly (female) , Vegeta (female) , raditz (female) , piccolo(female) , majin buu (female).
The story is interesting, some people complain about the writing, but this story is readable, with an understandable story, I'll see how it develops in the future.
Your idea is good, but the writing needs improvement. If you fix it, I'll read the story.
La historia es buena, pero la dejo por 2 razones 1 : no me gusta que el personaje ya tenga 90mil de poder cuando goku tiene 4 años entiendo que esta abusando de los senkai pero hubieras ido mas tranquilamente y la 2 y la mas importante ODIO DESDE EL FONDO CUALQUIERA FANFIC EN EL QUE EXISTA CAMBIO DE GENERO NO PUEDO COMPRENDER QUE LES PASA POR LA MENTE A LOS AUTORES O A LAS PERSONAS QUE LES GUSTA
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The grammar is absolutely atrocious. I’m used to reading mtl translations so that kind of stuff usually doesn’t bother me, but I legitimately couldn’t understand what was being said at certain times, and it ruins the flow of the story when i get caught up in deciphering the grammar. The story seems fine so far, though the MC is getting way too strong way too fast, with a power level of 90,000 when he’s still a toddler without having a hyperbolic time chamber or transformations or gravity training or any of that.
The story itself is very good, there are fan fics that start and I don't understand anything that's happening, it's already here to understand because it explains
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Pay attention here before you start. This is my first review for this work, and obviously, it won't be detailed since I've read up to chapter 5. But I've come here to clarify a few things and to obviously call the author out. In the first chapter (aux) it is stated that there's no Goku, only a female version with a similar background. However, people will be confused seeing a character that is clearly Goku since it's even named as such. The author talks and describes Goku implying as a girl, but pronouns keep changing between he/she him/her and at first, I was confused as to why. But after reading a few Brazilian words/slangs (Portuguese–BR) I think that the reason for many grammatical errors is due to being written in Portuguese and then being translated. Probably MTL since a human translating would remove or replace the slangs for something similar. I'm currently considering whether to continue reading. If I do. I comeback updating this review and I give comments or errors I might find.
Está muy bien espero que puedas continuar con la historia si es posible Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias