MHA: The Green Flash(Izukuxharem)

LV 12

Pomu

I would give the story a perfect rating of 5 out of 5 based on its potential for the future should the author work on a few of its flaws. However as it stands I can only give it as high as 4.0 starts out of 5 based on the factors below. - Writing Quality - While the writing quality is commendable, some improvements could be made to enhance clarity and organization. Clearer paragraph breaks and formatting would make the text more reader-friendly, and explicit transitions between different points of view (POV) would help avoid confusion. Although the writing demonstrates proficiency, grammar and syntax could be improved by addressing punctuation errors through careful proofreading, also a congruency between tenses needs to be perfected. - Story Development - The character interactions are skillfully written, effectively conveying their personalities and emotions through well-crafted dialogue. The inclusion of the hidden cave and the search for Izuku adds depth and suspense to the plot, which could be further explored for a more engaging experience. It is crucial for the author to clarify character motivations and intentions to provide better context for readers and deepen their understanding of the characters. For instance, delving into Izuku's initial fear and confusion upon encountering Kurama, followed by his growing excitement and determination to become a hero with Kurama's guidance, would add significant depth to the story. - Character Design - I think more detail could have been added on the characters, motivations, so as to give context to readers who are likely not as familiar. You could even go as far as to change how the characters look in your fan-fiction. - World Background - To provide context, incorporating more descriptive language to vividly depict the setting of the world would benefit readers who may be unfamiliar with either story. This would enhance the overall reading experience and create a more immersive environment. Overall, the story exhibits great promise, effectively engaging readers and leaving them eagerly anticipating what unfolds next. The narrative immediately grabs the reader's attention with an unexpected encounter between Izuku and Kurama, introducing a captivating twist to Izuku's journey.

LV 4

septimus_son

Excellent novel but I had to leave at the 11th chapter cause I casually found the harem tag, as a strict follower of the anti-harem sect I had to go once finding this out. The Writing quality is outstanding and I'm pretty sure as long as the author doesn't drop this, this will be pretty good. Even tho I will not be part of the readership of this book, I wish the Author luck and prosperity. And to the harem supporters, I hope that your soul will not be judged for reading harem trash

LV 1

Black_Sakyra

Like it. Waiting for some fluff in story>:3. Himiko Toga needs a hug. ............................................................................................................................................

LV 4

KsoGhost

I’m not the best at putting my thoughts into words, so I’ll just say I like it and leave it at that

LV 13

ammie_kaneki

I love the book I just hope the author doesn't lose the motivation and continues with the work till the end.

LV 1

DaoistCLRzne

Essa história é ótima, espero que continue com os lançamentos,tudo de bom para o autor ..........................................................